Nice story. Writing quality: The English is good and you write well in the all knowing pov. Story development: The story develops well and I especially like how you describe the battle/fights. You explain them in a way that gives us a enough, but leaves enough to the imagination. Character design: Rohan is a nice character, but so far haven't yet gotten to know so well the other characters. World background: Not much of the world is known, but follows the basic mana and mana core. A good story and keep up the writing. Gonna give this a follow.
Le_Krackeen
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LIKETygershadow:the writing/grammar is 3.5 stars at best even fantasy simulator has slightly better writing/grammar than this.
TheTrickster12:If the writing and grammar is 3.5 for you then wow most novels must be lower than a 2