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Bartothegreat
BartothegreatLv143yr
2022-01-28 01:10

I loved the story, characters, plot. The beginning was great, middle was fantastic. The climax... was where it dropped off. The pacing just went nuts and it really hurt the great things you had set up. So by the ending, the resolution just did not feel rewarding. for one, you developed Aria so well and she became one if the best characters, yet she gets zero screen time in the ending. Not to mention Yvonne. She was turning into a great antagonist but just gets thrown in the background then randomly written off. it's a shame because this story had so much potential and I still loved it. But it just gets extremely rushed to the ending. I look forward to reading more of your stuff and thanks for writing this story.

I like them big, do you?

Sixth
4.6
198 Chs

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Sixth
SixthAuthor

Thanks for reading.

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Sixth here, the author ^^ I wrote two stories after ending my ongoing ones, and this one is by far the most fun to write for me. I will do my best to give daily updates, around 1-3 chapters. The usual update rate is 2 chaps daily, but I often throw another one ^^ Come and hang out on my discord too ^^ (Link in synopsis)

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definitely did not get hooked by the cover.. yep definitely not.. i umm.. got hooked by the synopsis hmm yes the synopsis.. what a beautiful synopsis, those beautiful curves.. what a great cursive font, and wow! those huge round... bold letters, they look very bree.. readable *cough* *cough*

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