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Bartothegreat
BartothegreatLv143yr
2022-01-28 01:10

I loved the story, characters, plot. The beginning was great, middle was fantastic. The climax... was where it dropped off. The pacing just went nuts and it really hurt the great things you had set up. So by the ending, the resolution just did not feel rewarding. for one, you developed Aria so well and she became one if the best characters, yet she gets zero screen time in the ending. Not to mention Yvonne. She was turning into a great antagonist but just gets thrown in the background then randomly written off. it's a shame because this story had so much potential and I still loved it. But it just gets extremely rushed to the ending. I look forward to reading more of your stuff and thanks for writing this story.

I like them big, do you?

Sixth
4.6
198 Chs

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Sixth
SixthAuthor

Thanks for reading.

3yr
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After peering deep into the author's soul I have learned that he needs a pic of his favorite cat to motivate him into write more.~~~~~~~~~~~

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Sixth here, the author ^^ I wrote two stories after ending my ongoing ones, and this one is by far the most fun to write for me. I will do my best to give daily updates, around 1-3 chapters. The usual update rate is 2 chaps daily, but I often throw another one ^^ Come and hang out on my discord too ^^ (Link in synopsis)

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Flames, Fireworks, and Bombs...? I.. the Ultimate Arch-Wizard from the Crimson Demon Clan, Megumin shall read this novel! Five stars for the tag 'Explosion'!!

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You really shouldn't let him hide his identity there are to many like that and it gets bad as the story goes on I really like the novel so far keep it up.

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LexiSmith
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definitely did not get hooked by the cover.. yep definitely not.. i umm.. got hooked by the synopsis hmm yes the synopsis.. what a beautiful synopsis, those beautiful curves.. what a great cursive font, and wow! those huge round... bold letters, they look very bree.. readable *cough* *cough*

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NoSchool_Arc
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you writing style is so confusing I need to read couple of time to understand it. Overall good idea but bad delivery. ,........................

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i like them big and i like them round and perky a a A A A

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RichardHM
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Wonderful, great, perfect, incredible? To continue like this, without a doubt, one of my favorite novels. I like Reylin's personality. How he has transmitted his emotions to the game, bringing out another facet of him; although I wish that, in real life, he would also do more than just depend on his parents. I suppose he is still young and maturing or will he live like this forever? Harem: Aria as the leader of the harem, please. Layla, Maya, Steel Melody, Yuki and Emilia and more? Titiana, for example. I like them all.

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