Review Detail of OldManMarcus in Black Wind, White Lotus
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đNot me reading ur whole book cause you commented lol on my commented. Anyway its an aight book, i dont read alot of female leads so cant rlly relate for first few chaps. Only advice is paragraphs are a bit long, do space them out
Black Wind, White Lotus
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Now that I'm re-reading the early chapters, I see what you mean. They are definitely more meaty than recent ones. I guess since it's my first novel, my writing style changed over time and I didn't notice. At any rate, inserted a couple of line breaks here and there to make the entire enterprise slightly more readable.
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Sake_Vision:Now that I'm re-reading the early chapters, I see what you mean. They are definitely more meaty than recent ones. I guess since it's my first novel, my writing style changed over time and I didn't notice. At any rate, inserted a couple of line breaks here and there to make the entire enterprise slightly more readable.