I would say the author is raw potential. They need to do more work to make their narrative smoother, which, at the moment is largely chunky and rigid. The grammar is slightly inconsistent in places. They are inexperienced when using a variety of different terminology, and should be wary when overloading the reader with too much detail, expecially names.
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