Review Detail of HangerBaby in Magus of the Wizarding World
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well i gave it a shot but i cant. the pov changes more times a chapter than i blink and the grammar is so bad one guy comments on almost every paragraph with ways to fix it. of course none of the mistakes have been fixed like most fics on this site the author seems to be to lazy to fix his mistakes. story wise while not the worst is still bad as there are no real driving factors for the mcs thirst for power other than "ive been reborn" character design is blaah. you know nothing about the mc but for some reason he wants to be the best with no explanation for why other than "i been reborn with a cheat mwhahaha" lame really updating is not bad world background you must have at least working knowledge of both harry potter and magus world otherwise you wont know whats going on to much as like i said the writing quality is terrible
Magus of the Wizarding World
Arrowinmyknee
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Thank you for the Review. I didn't knew there where paragraph comments since i am pretty new to this site, thanks for pointing that out. I will try the to correct the mistakes I find tomorrow since I am busy today. The POV should be 3rd Person, I seem to have written the first few chapters in first person i will also try to correct that. I am very sorry for the inconvenience this is actually my first story and I am not a native English speaker. But I have fun writing this story and will try to improve myself. Thank you for reading my Story :)
Arrowinmyknee:Thank you for the Review. I didn't knew there where paragraph comments since i am pretty new to this site, thanks for pointing that out. I will try the to correct the mistakes I find tomorrow since I am busy today. The POV should be 3rd Person, I seem to have written the first few chapters in first person i will also try to correct that. I am very sorry for the inconvenience this is actually my first story and I am not a native English speaker. But I have fun writing this story and will try to improve myself. Thank you for reading my Story :)
These type of authors are why I still visit this site, glad that there is stilll nice and devoloping authors, i'll give this story a shot [img=recommend]
Arrowinmyknee:Thank you for the Review. I didn't knew there where paragraph comments since i am pretty new to this site, thanks for pointing that out. I will try the to correct the mistakes I find tomorrow since I am busy today. The POV should be 3rd Person, I seem to have written the first few chapters in first person i will also try to correct that. I am very sorry for the inconvenience this is actually my first story and I am not a native English speaker. But I have fun writing this story and will try to improve myself. Thank you for reading my Story :)
lostboy859:These type of authors are why I still visit this site, glad that there is stilll nice and devoloping authors, i'll give this story a shot [img=recommend]
Arrowinmyknee:Thank you for the Review. I didn't knew there where paragraph comments since i am pretty new to this site, thanks for pointing that out. I will try the to correct the mistakes I find tomorrow since I am busy today. The POV should be 3rd Person, I seem to have written the first few chapters in first person i will also try to correct that. I am very sorry for the inconvenience this is actually my first story and I am not a native English speaker. But I have fun writing this story and will try to improve myself. Thank you for reading my Story :)
he is not developing, he did not correct his mistakes in this novel if you read the novel you will understand that. There are over 100+ gramar mistakes in this novel and the author didnt even fix one of them. in every chapter there is full paragraps full of mistakes. Im not lying, trolling or exaggraerating that is the full truth
lostboy859:These type of authors are why I still visit this site, glad that there is stilll nice and devoloping authors, i'll give this story a shot [img=recommend]
Arrowinmyknee:Thank you for the Review. I didn't knew there where paragraph comments since i am pretty new to this site, thanks for pointing that out. I will try the to correct the mistakes I find tomorrow since I am busy today. The POV should be 3rd Person, I seem to have written the first few chapters in first person i will also try to correct that. I am very sorry for the inconvenience this is actually my first story and I am not a native English speaker. But I have fun writing this story and will try to improve myself. Thank you for reading my Story :)
you know he did go back and fix things but he still missed a lot cus when you are the one writing its harder to spot mistakes and why are you getting so angry it's not the end of the world jeez
MAIDENLESS:stop bull*****ing you didnt even once fix a mistake or improved your grammar
He did not. He already knows about the chapter comments and the fact that all he has to do is go to each paragraph or sentence with a comment on it to check if there's problems with his grammar. It would only take 15-30 minutes to fix his fckups in a chapter, he could redone this whole story for a massive increase in popularity and it would have only taken him like a week of casually working on it. And its been more then a year.
Nuxa:you know he did go back and fix things but he still missed a lot cus when you are the one writing its harder to spot mistakes and why are you getting so angry it's not the end of the world jeez
Autor qué pasó con la historia por favor sigue a mi encanto como empezó lo de la tva y los giros en la historia demostrando cómo el en si no tiene privilegio del poder del guion y lo que podría salir mal siempre lo hará dando ha entender que el prota siempre se las apaña para salir de los problemas pensando en todas las posibilidades con la ayuda del chip. Por fa vuelve y termina este fanfic yo leí uno parecido donde Harry muere y se vuelve un obscures y los dioses muerte destino y esos otros con ayuda de Phoenix le dan un sistema mezclan Harry Potter y Marvel pero fue muy abrupto su cambio y mezcla de uno a otro. No como este fanfic que le da pistas al potra pero siempre hay algo qué pasa por alto y cómo analizaste e implementaste las consecuencias de viajas en el tiempo en el mundo mago con lo de marvel.
Arrowinmyknee:Thank you for the Review. I didn't knew there where paragraph comments since i am pretty new to this site, thanks for pointing that out. I will try the to correct the mistakes I find tomorrow since I am busy today. The POV should be 3rd Person, I seem to have written the first few chapters in first person i will also try to correct that. I am very sorry for the inconvenience this is actually my first story and I am not a native English speaker. But I have fun writing this story and will try to improve myself. Thank you for reading my Story :)