Review Detail of DarkTheLibrarian in My Hero: Quirk Evolution

My only problem with this story is that Erin and Jess seem WAY to forced. Not to mention Erin is overly psychotic and stalkerish. Jess seems slightly mentally unstable and not in a way that u would normally be for someone in her situation. Also the hero name and Vigi name are both just needlessly bad. Great story and ideas. But it feels like your way too forceful in implementing your OCs. Also Kaite was just thrown in and just NEW everything with little explanation.