I was hoping for something a bit more mature but this is like a Disney's little mermaid version of a evolution with a system novel. I mean your grammar is great, the story had potential, but it's not something made for adults. I was so into it until the turtle showed up and then it just went downhill for me personally. The teenage part which you know what I mean did it for me.
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