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2021-10-03 08:50

Review: Writing Quality has some grammar mistakes. Stability of Updates is pretty good. Story Development is forced to the point of me making sarcastic remarks such as: Of course it's weakened alone and you just so happen to kill it in one shot, or Obviously the spirit beast wouldn't attack you since you cleeeearly don't have anything it wants *cough Life Energy cough* and of course the panda would give you its ring and spirit bone because you helped it with something. Character Design, The Mc is bland and lacks a certain spark that comes with most reincarnated novels, I'm not bashing your ideas but, it just doesn't entertain or capture my attention. World Background, It would be rated lower but the world is douluo dalu so meh, back on track... we don't get any information other than what's going on right in the Mc's bubble, so we don't know the time and/or what part of the story it is, This isn't good for newer readers and makes it not feel like the douluo story. Summary: Writing Quality gets a 4 star, Stability of Updates gets a 5 star, Story Development gets a 3 star, Character Design gets a 2 star, and World Background gets a 4 star. tl:dr: minor grammar mistakes, good update stability, semi-forced plot, bland character, and very little beginning information on where the story starts. Overall: 3.6 stars

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