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Thissmithy_Manga
Thissmithy_MangaLv133yr
2021-08-24 22:28

the writing quality is not good, the mc can buy whatever he wants from the system and has x100 training speed so he's incredibly op to the point where he kills im instantly and is in charge of the wg, also he wants to become a pirate, I have no words for how dumb and inconsequential that is, I mean whats he gonna do tell the gov he's in charge of to give himself a bounty and play pretend like a child?

One Piece: Zayn The Celestial Dragon

Buggy_The_Clown
3.6
18 Chs

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Tandoris
TandorisLv3

yeah , i had the same reaction, just the wishes are already way too broken , like, at this point you could have him wish to be invincible that would have make no diff imo.

3yr
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DaoistyQNGiX
DaoistyQNGiXLv14

Thanks for the heads up!

3yr
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Empyrium
EmpyriumLv15

So here is a honest review, nnot hese 5 stars ratings. Writing quality: It is really bad, so many mistakes it is so annoying, there is no sentence with no mistakes, often it are so stupid mistakes. Story development: There really isn't a story, he can enslave anybody he wants so he could enslave the whole world, end of the story. So there won't be any ffights hich are dangeours for him because he can just buy op skills/enslave the enemy. Character design: He is overpowered and seems a bit crazy with his wierd laugh, at the end of the day he is just a crazy person with power. Update stability: 12 chapter a week what he has for now is really good, 5 stars World background: I mean it is One Piece, so yeah nothing special. Fazit: The he is way to overpowered, he is already at the top of rhe world even before chapter 20. The bbad rammar is really ruining the story so I don't recommend to read it, only of you are bored.

3yr

Uncrowned_Hokage
Uncrowned_HokageLv4

Honestly I love opmc but here, I'm not gonna complain about the grammar cuz I'm also bad at it. For the wishes I like on what he wishes, which is system shop which he can buy anything and an unlimited points. I kinda don't like is the enslaving, which he can literally enslaved everyone in the world, the time he buys the skill that can make someone their slave, makes him for me strongest in that world. What I don't really like is where he recruit more like enslaved in a different way just without using the slave skill. I just it's not for me. One Piece fanfic for me is aside from becoming OP which mostly ff will do at the end of the story are ,adventuring ,building up relationship, becoming strong and etc. while here he can just pick anyone then make them loyalty to the max then 75x training effect like the first mate and it will make them OP, idk if the author will put a thing where if someone has a stronger mind they can't be enslave. Well that's just it, this only my review, read this ff if you like the concept of the story Btw author I really envy you for writing something, I have a tons of idea for a story but I can't just write it up or maybe I was too lazy HAHAHAHAHAHAH

3yr
AnimeFan_OG
AnimeFan_OGLv13

OPMC fanfic!! I love this fanfic already even if i only readthe first two chapters. Hope it doesn't get dropped. MOREMOREMOREMOREMOREMOREMOREMOREMOREMOREMOREMOREMOREMO

3yr
lazyotaku68
lazyotaku68Lv1

Wow, sorry but this is reaally bad, the grammer is not good, I’m not gonna complain about the wishes since that’s what some people like but overall it’s not anything new and doesn’t even compensate for the copy and paste story by being done well.

3yr
TheViciousVillain
TheViciousVillainLv2

Im trying to be as humble as i can, Review: The story is rushed, The mc is too overpowered, The grammar is- not so good? And the story development is boring Overall: 2.2 (My opinion)

2yr
CookieUchiha
CookieUchihaLv2

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3yr
LuckyStrawberry
LuckyStrawberryLv2

Hey there! I'm more of a reader than a writer but if you would like I can edit your work for free, I'm actually curious how will this story would go. Of course if that's fine with you 😄

3yr
_Khaled_
_Khaled_Lv14

I don’t get it why is he presistant to be a pirate sinCe he took Im out . . . . . . . ; ;’;$;$;$;$$;;$$;$;$;$;$;$;838.!):&373).!:&38;);!38,63!:8,73$:&,7:$,&),

3yr
_Scarlett_Dawn
_Scarlett_DawnLv4

It's a Okay book, in my opinion though, it's too fast-paced and the mc is op too quickly, a slower pace would be good. As for the wishes, the 100x multiplier is good, but the System part just doesn't sit well with me.

3yr
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