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DaoistuBDitW
DaoistuBDitWLv45mth
2024-11-14 20:24

Good start, nice way of blending the world. I don't have much knowledge about Dark Souls, but it is quite intriguing. The only problem I felt was the use of "Oh Kami", it just destroys the flow of the story, as the rest are delivered in English and "Kami" is japanese. There is nothing wrong with using it, but as a reader I felt it disrupts the flow of the content as I read.

Naruto: The Chosen Undead

Adamo_Amet
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133 Chs

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CasualDegenerate
CasualDegenerateLv4

This is like complaining that the Jutsu names in a Naruto fic is in japanese or that they didn’t translate Hokage into english

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Kinato_123
Kinato_123Lv1

Eu pessoalmente adoro quando as histórias tem suas próprias gírias e coisas do gênero tipo o " pelas barbas de merlin " em harry potter ou no caso de naruto " pelo amor de hikudou "

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DaoistuBDitW
DaoistuBDitWLv4

some expression won't destroy the flow, some does 'oh kami' is one of them. Because this is an expression not someone calling a name, and Rasengan is same in japanese and english, same for titular name hokage it's a common name given to the administrative leader of Konoha. While Kami is titular name but 'oh kami' is an expression. My opinion is that when a predominantly english writing has an expression in different language messes with the flow of us readers reading.

CasualDegenerate:This is like complaining that the Jutsu names in a Naruto fic is in japanese or that they didn’t translate Hokage into english
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DaoistuBDitW
DaoistuBDitWLv4

My primary language is not English, but we are having a conversation in English and says 'daivame evan entha ee parayane', it will feel annoying, right.

CasualDegenerate:This is like complaining that the Jutsu names in a Naruto fic is in japanese or that they didn’t translate Hokage into english
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VesperNebula
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A genuine review. For me, this story is a 4.8. The character interactions are well thought out, the world-building is interesting, and even the Souls world is incredibly well done. I absolutely loved what you did with the NPCs. The only reason I’m not giving it a full 5 is because of a few moments that frustrated me—not because they were bad, but just due to my personal taste. I personally prefer a protagonist who’s more intelligent and doesn’t take much nonsense (basically: near-perfect). It’s a bit of a childish preference, but that’s just how it is for me. Seeing how Naruto interacts, how the other ninjas act around him, and his lack of sharpness when it comes to figuring out certain important things he’s overlooking really frustrates me! But that’s not nearly enough to make me dislike the story. In fact, it’s actually a great thing—it shows how well the author has given Naruto a consistent and solid personality instead of making him bounce between “perfect” and “idiot” like many fanfics tend to do. My only concern is the future of the story. Personally, I’d find it ridiculous if, later on, ninja world characters became as strong as Naruto or somehow ended up in the Dark Souls world (for example, Naruto bringing them there). I really hope that doesn’t happen. BUT, even if it does, I definitely won’t drop this story. The author has proven to be highly capable at writing and developing the plot, and when they do something questionable, they provide solid reasoning behind it. So, I’ll always give the benefit of the doubt and see where things go next. Excellent work—keep it up~!

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Dr_bungee
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Phenomenal job One of the best fanfics I’ve read on this site. The characters have life to them, they carry the same love that was put into the originals. The way you give just enough details to flesh things out and keep it interesting without making it an info dump. Plot seems natural with very little forced interaction and problems. You give reference material for those that might not know the franchises as well. Just absolutely love it. This book gets my seal of approval

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daniel_rivera_2588
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Es interesante en el desarrollo de personajes con ñas tramas que ofrecen este autor..................................................................................................................................

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Tyler_rigby
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love it . .

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BlandName2406
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I legit never do a review. I mostly just give power stones. But please x20… don’t drop this. This is an amazing and beautiful piece of art. This is actually amazing and got mad that I have to wait for another chapter. I 100% recommend this to anyone. Even if you haven’t read Dark Souls; it is like reading an original series. 5 stars no problem.😌

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Kayaya
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Absolute PEAK finally a good ds fic, keep cooking author, you're making a lotta people really happy hehe . . .. .. . .. . ... . . . . . .. . .

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CasualReader1
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good stuff. well written and the story is interesting. sadly it's not a premade novel. so i have to wait for the update.

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UnsuspctingVilager
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Awesome novel, i had never even thought of imagining a fictional character from another series (naruto) enter dark souls world. it's been really interesting so far (chapter 37), the interaction between naruto and the dark souls characters, naruto dealing with the brutality and darkness of this new world and never giving up, it all comes together to create this awesome story of resolve, courage and of course comedy. These are done just right in this story: the cruelty of the dark souls world, naruto being naruto, the shinobi world being full of light and darkness, kindness and schemes, and also sometimes game lore and some real life basic scientific knowledge, basic as they may be, they were very interesting when used in the story. Thank you for this amazing story and i hope to see more, like much more, if dark souls 1 ends, i'd love to see dark souls 2, 3 and the rest of souls games, bloodborne, elden ring and sekiro: shadows die twice, sekiro would be interesting because of the similarities between the shinobi world and sekiro world. Please continue this story with the games that you have played and enjoyed, whichever they are, i really want to see more of this story: naruto and the souls series, though to be honest even one game is enough if you want to keep it that way, dark souls 1 can be infinitely replayed, each time playing a certain way if you want and make different choices with the world and the characters, so it's up to you author-san, i just hope to see more. Have a great day.

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