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2021-08-24 05:22

I liked the design of the characters, I thought they were very cute. But there were moments that I couldn't tell if they were the characters talking or the narrator telling the story. But your writing is very good, keep it up.

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That's should be Anya's thought s. will edit soon. thanks for the honest review.

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