Review Detail of Omnitheus in The Nine Monarchs

Overall, this has a rich story to tell and broad plot given its title and theme. World Background is good. It's difficult to create your own universe especially with supernatural beings. Author did a great job with constructing his universe. Story is fast-paced. It has a strong first chapter and the preceding chapters had a lot of action, as in fighting action which was narrated in good detail. Character design though could be a bit stale at times. There was a difficulty in the distinction of characters. Introduction of characters could be improved when they have a unique distinction. In an omniscient POV style writing, only the author's thought of the character is perceived so it's quite a challenge. Writing quality overall is good. I like the play on words, a romanticist style but not too much. Exposition is just right in each chapter to put the vibe of the setting. Only issue I found was sometimes, since there are many characters, it's difficult to follow what's going on. Tip on this, even if it the POV was from the author, you can put yourself in the main character or main POV (in that chapter), that way, readers can perceive the things in the story, the way that character does. Also helps with character design disctinction. I don't have a problem with update stability as long as the chapters are of good quality. Keep writing!