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ImSadge
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2022-01-31 11:04

I’ve read a few first chapters and I must say this novel have the potential. But I would like the author developed more about character’s thoughts rather than just telling, I think the author can easily fix this. Well that’s all for me, all the best for you author.

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QueenHalloween16
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Thank you! I will try to work on that 😉 and don’t worry, my writing improves throughout the book

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