Profaned flame?

Mf, y-you didn't pay me and now I have to live eating dust!!

This is surely not because I was threaten to do this. -The writing quality sure is improving and the author has made progress in his way of describing things (although I still have a stroke and some miss typos here and there). The way he chose his words was quite easy to read unlike some of the novels where you must have the dictionary by your side. This is both good and bad as if you want to delve further into developing characters, you must know the way to play with those sophisticated words. -The way the author describes the actions of his characters feels quite bland and repeats like at the end of any character sentence he just does as the guide told by adding "he/she said/thought". By focusing more on their conversations and actions, you can express more feelings to develop their inner emotions.

Okay... this guy can't be this productive, something is fishy here. Hmmm...

My ancestor? Pfft, grandpa you need to lay the fk down. What are you gonna do? Weeping to my face? [img=faceslap] After all, you're too old to do anything. It's not good for your back, grandpa.

You mannerless brat, dare to threaten this unproductive cat? Courting death I say[img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]

ain't no way bro, a new chap? Pog

Didn’t expect you to be here tho =)))

…grammar and wording

…Give me more descriptions while doing dialogues

You shameless enough to bring your face up eh?

lol not really, just here to remind you to write haha

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Don’t even think to change pov here, it’s irritating arghhh

but I'm Sadge and not cat? why do I need catnip?

me doing review ay! First thing first, the writting is very good. Despite my low ass vocab but I still can comprehend it pretty clear. Doesn't need high word to describe and keep it simple is what I like. Good point, 5/5 Stability, 5/5 (2 chaps/day? absolute madlad!) Story Development, I don't know much since it only has 4 chaps but till now, I feel very amused by the plot and concept of the systems. But still, I only give it 4/5. (it can get me 5/5 if the author do keep me entertaining with the plot) Character design, pretty decent. 4/5 World BG, well maybe pass this part cuz there is no world BG till this point (chapter 4) All the best, author! Ay! Ay!

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Author is definitely a trash person. How can you write such trash story! Do you even write something that isn’t GARBAGE! (Pls don’t take this serious, I’m just doing this for fun lol.)

Simp… start to look down on the Author… lol XD

oh god I cannot read this part without cringing myself lol