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2021-08-12 03:39

So far pretty poggers. The characters are fleshed out but kinda cliche in some areas if you ask me. Don't really like pokemon nicknames but otherwise this is pretty good.

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One Word Review: Decent. I will start with the Pros and then go with the cons which may or may not help the author. Pros: Different approach to a pokemon fanfiction by making MC not know much about pokemon even if he is from Earth. Author is trying to build a personality to the characters which is good. Interesting choice of pokemon and author also does a good job of not just giving away hidden abilities like many fan fictions do. Cons: Slow Pace (too slow for it's own good). Approach is different but story seems plain and bland at places(cliche too). Advice to author: People who read Fanfic are very familiar with Pokemon so you don't need to explain in detail about every Pokemon or try to build a thing like what Pokemon type it is and stuff. For example, MC asking what type his 2nd Pokemon is and Nurse Joy trying to build a suspense for two chapters doesn't really interest readers, it seems like a drag. Because the one who is reading it already knows even though the MC doesn't. Slow pace novels might be a good build-up for characters and world background but you seem to get lost in the idea of keeping it slow for the sake of it. There are number of scenarios where I felt, it did not help the character or the story in any way. You really need to interest the readers even if it is paced slow, so try creating interesting scenarios to make up for it. If you don't like my review then ignore it, if you do, then it's good for your story too. Trust me, I wrote Pokemon fanfic on this site and I am not blindly advising. Anyways good luck with the improvements in the book. I will review it again if it changes ✌️

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