Review Detail of Carlos_Balbizan in Ordeal of the Hopebringer: A Harry Potter Fanfiction

and well, we have a "mature" mc panicking and acting like a kid (he is, but it's been said since the first cap that he was mature and all that...besides the emotional control occlumency provides) it's alright. Of course the love interest as a Hermione. besides now being the golden quintet in place of the trio... spelling mistakes getting worse, these conversations sometimes don't even make sense (and it's getting worse with time, in the first chapter it was just a lack of comma. but now it's hard to read) 2,6⭐