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2023-08-23 05:21

This is another moronic trash YURI novel. The grammar is trash. The characters are morons. The MC is a moron. Their actions are moronic and so are their thoughts. Everything is a mess. Any1 rating this higher than 3 stars is a paid actor or a moron themselves. 4.9 stars :D what a joke. I feel like I should get paid for having to read this atrocity for 7 chapters.

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Zerin_Lee
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Wheeze- I agree it sort of sucks but you should read the first version of it that one was wayyy worse if you feel angry on this- imagine reading the first version. I apologize about the wrong grammar and stuff English is not my native language so yeah... though thanks for the comments I see where I went wrong and I could improve on that instead. Thanks for the review! Have a nice day reader hope you find a better book!

BrabbitX
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Well, if it was any worse, i'm sure I would have dropped on 1st chapter without any comments or even writing a review. I'm angry at the whole YURI tag, most yuri novels are terrible, so when i saw the 4.9 rating I was hyped and then destroyed when I read it. I tried hard to read this, as you can see by the many comments I left. I hope you got some idea of the problems in your novel from all my comments. Maybe a 3rd rewrite will be even better (if you ever decide to do that). While i didn't leave comments in early chapters (i was trying to not focus on all the problems), there were still a lot of issues there.

Zerin_Lee:Wheeze- I agree it sort of sucks but you should read the first version of it that one was wayyy worse if you feel angry on this- imagine reading the first version. I apologize about the wrong grammar and stuff English is not my native language so yeah... though thanks for the comments I see where I went wrong and I could improve on that instead. Thanks for the review! Have a nice day reader hope you find a better book!
Zerin_Lee
Zerin_LeeAuthor

Yeah sorry about that-! But you can check out my other book [Otome Game: I, The Heroine Will be your Saviour]! it's way better than this I promise! It's a little comedic slice of life and stuff, but thank you again!

BrabbitX:Well, if it was any worse, i'm sure I would have dropped on 1st chapter without any comments or even writing a review. I'm angry at the whole YURI tag, most yuri novels are terrible, so when i saw the 4.9 rating I was hyped and then destroyed when I read it. I tried hard to read this, as you can see by the many comments I left. I hope you got some idea of the problems in your novel from all my comments. Maybe a 3rd rewrite will be even better (if you ever decide to do that). While i didn't leave comments in early chapters (i was trying to not focus on all the problems), there were still a lot of issues there.
BrabbitX
BrabbitXLv5

You have nerves of steel. Respect. No clue why you would want me to read your other story, considering I only leave negative comments, rarely I bother being constructive, as most of the time it's just a waste of time.

Zerin_Lee:Yeah sorry about that-! But you can check out my other book [Otome Game: I, The Heroine Will be your Saviour]! it's way better than this I promise! It's a little comedic slice of life and stuff, but thank you again!
Zerin_Lee
Zerin_LeeAuthor

I like negative comments I see mistakes, I don't see some of them as bad- just things to improve on. You said that you were expecting good Yuri I agree those books are hard to find. You didn't seem mad or just hating without good reason just disappointed I feel that sometimes XD

BrabbitX:You have nerves of steel. Respect. No clue why you would want me to read your other story, considering I only leave negative comments, rarely I bother being constructive, as most of the time it's just a waste of time.
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