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HolyDiver
HolyDiverLv53yr
2021-12-24 09:47

The premise was pretty interesting. The story was definitely enough to get me hooked and wanting more. However, the writing was simply atrocious. I have no idea if it's a translation issue or the author is ESL and is still learning English. Having an editor would help this novel a lot. Or perhaps even some kind of writing assistant to check for grammar and spelling.

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lumydee
lumydeeAuthor

🙈🙈Thank you so much for the love. I'm soon thinking of adding an extra editor on my side these days🤩🤩

Worn_out_by
Worn_out_byLv15

Yeah this authors novels are frankly poorly written grammer wise and if he has editors he needs new ones cause the current ones can’t do their jobs

NPCs
NPCsLv13

I am an editor too. Incase you need one.

lumydee:🙈🙈Thank you so much for the love. I'm soon thinking of adding an extra editor on my side these days🤩🤩
IsekaiLord
IsekaiLordLv4

naaaah, how did i catch you lacking this bad? You are gaaaaay!

NPCs:I am an editor too. Incase you need one.
DaoOfNaps
DaoOfNapsLv4

you're a homosexual!!!

IsekaiLord:naaaah, how did i catch you lacking this bad? You are gaaaaay!
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