Review Detail of Rey_G in Human Binary: The Unrivalled King of Technology
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Not worth the time. The story is expositive, info-dump quality, "There are bajillion continents, the bajillions continents have these countries here that I will give you the names, and they are like that and blahblah." Still wondering up to this date what an "Ais" is.
Human Binary: The Unrivalled King of Technology
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I read just the first chapter, which does not impede me in any way from writing a review. The thing is, if you feel the need for your prologue to be an info-dump, you are probably -read as definitely- doing something wrong. Not to say the vocabulary problems present after the "world building," or "background," as you stated; too many repetitions of "the fatty," "the man," "the three men," which takes a huge chunk out of imersion. The story seems bland, you are not showing, you are telling.
_Evergreen:How many chapters do you read that makes you consider it an info dump. Only Half of chapter 1 contains the world background of the current timeline, 2100. Apart from that, you can't find such again. So if you think world background is not necessary, then....
Hmm, that your thought anyway. But I deliberately hide their names to follow the plot. And if you think am telling not showing. Be my guest, show me.
Rey_G:I read just the first chapter, which does not impede me in any way from writing a review. The thing is, if you feel the need for your prologue to be an info-dump, you are probably -read as definitely- doing something wrong. Not to say the vocabulary problems present after the "world building," or "background," as you stated; too many repetitions of "the fatty," "the man," "the three men," which takes a huge chunk out of imersion. The story seems bland, you are not showing, you are telling.
_Evergreen:Hmm, that your thought anyway. But I deliberately hide their names to follow the plot. And if you think am telling not showing. Be my guest, show me.
Rey_G:How am I supposed to show you if you are the one writing the story, makes no sense.
