Rey_G
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For some further reading, refer to "Stream of Consciousness" or "Flux of Consciousness." It is an advanced narrative tool - to be handled with care. The most prominent styles involve dumping it in the middle of a scene - generally in stories told by omniscient narrators contamined with a character's viewpoint. Like the name implies, it is a fast, loosely structured and - oftentimes - explosive stream of thoughts from a character, presented by the narrator. You can see why this is bad for a story to be written solely in it, and with incomplete characteristics at that. Most novice authors do that without perceiving.
I read just the first chapter, which does not impede me in any way from writing a review. The thing is, if you feel the need for your prologue to be an info-dump, you are probably -read as definitely- doing something wrong. Not to say the vocabulary problems present after the "world building," or "background," as you stated; too many repetitions of "the fatty," "the man," "the three men," which takes a huge chunk out of imersion. The story seems bland, you are not showing, you are telling.
Low control of the scene, the author constantly writes "Then this happens. Next that happens. Then the man thinks that. Ant then the other man does that." The author has nil knowledge on how realistic interactions feel like, and on how people react to certain things, to the point that war vets have the mindset of five year old children.