As the first novel I wrote, it will always have a special place in my heart. If you want to travel in a world full of mystery, action, war and development with a leading role that you will love and adopt, you are in the right place.

The story seems promising and It really has potential. One thing I would suggest is you could use 'he' instead of Asil in all the lines. Otherwise, it's totally fine and I look forward to reading new chapters and storyline...[img=update][img=recommend]

You can tell there is a great attempt at trying to build up a deep story in here. There is a lot of focus on lore and the backstory of the characters to make them all seem more real and establish a connection with the reader. The big problem, is that the way the story is being told needs a lot more polishment. There is a lot of repeated words such as "the man opened the door, then he walked through the door, then proceeded to close the door..." over the chapters, when saying things like "the door was opened and he proceeded to walk through it" would have had the same effect. The dialogue also needs some work with everyone talking with too many info dumps to address who they are, where they come from, how they feel, and why they do what they do. It's simply too much information transmitted in a very unnatural way. People will say things like "I know why you think this way, you think this way because this happened and this happened, causing you to do this and that". It's just so weird hearing someone explain to them why they are the way they are. Narration also suffers from that, with any time a new character is introduced we receive more exposition and more info dumps about their backstory before we even get to know them. The story seems fine overall, but the writing quality needs a bit of work. I'm sure more practice and study will help make the author's passion be delivered in the best way possible in the future.

Her seferinde ayıla bayıla okuyoruz Orkun'cuğum, bu da bizim iflâh olmaz Nirvana enayiliğimiz işte. Eline emeğine sağlık balım. Takipteyim.

It's one of the most enjoyable books I've ever read. It's an immersive and intriguing story, and I hope there'll be more. I wish the author all the best.

I am also a first-time novelist and I must commend the way the action started in the novel without needless narration. Your writing style is unique. I'm still reading so I can't say much for now. I hope it continues to wow me

Eline emeğine sağlık Orkun'cuğum. Çeviri için teşekkürler, zevkle okudum. Takipteyim.✨ Çeviri bittikten sonraki planın ne bu arada merak ettim.

The author's grammar was splendid. The first-person narration was so immersive that made me have a deep dive into the story. This is action packed! Literally every chapter bringing up a creature and our characters fighting them, and I have to say that these sequences are pretty well written. I could see the things happening as I was reading it. The world building in this novel is really good. Dialogues are also well written and also funny in places making it very much entertaining. All in all, A splendid job of a novel. I am looking forward to the upcoming chapters.

Often times it would be difficult to judge a cultivation story when there are only a few chapters posted. But the relationship between the protagonist and his father is somewhat unique to the take because often times it is a solo ride for the protagonist until later on. Since this is the first novel the Author wrote, there are more obvious mistakes. But all of it can be fixed and hopefully author will improve as more chapters are posted. An example is the use of "quotation marks". (You should be more careful where to place it.) The plot development is still little but it is there and I can see potential in it. Characters are also on the way to develop into something nice so it is something to look forward. All in all, it was a good quick read. Hopefully there are more in the future