If you get an editor to fix up your grammar the story will be a bit better. Also, I don't know why you are suddenly taking random characters out of the plot. The summoning ticket says it will take the characters out of a parallel timeline so I don't see how it suddenly erases them from the MC's timeline. Similarly you should go more in depth about the summoning process as I am not sure if the beasts he created have the original character's memories/knowledge or if it is just their character/personality that the beasts inherits.

I'm not a professional author, i read lot of fanfics but I found few good stories. So I'm writing this which is to my liking, and sorry for the grammar mistakes. Thanks for your support😁😁

[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

it's a different story than usual soul land stories. Mc is op spirit beast with the system, there are some holes in the story but overall it's great.

Super legal🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩ķkkkkkkkkkkķ kkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkk🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩kkkkk 🤩

its good, its good , its good , its good, its good , its good ,its good, its good , its good , its good, its good , its good ,its good, its good , its good , its good, its good , its good

The writing quality/translation of this novel is borderline MTL. How do I know this novel is mtl? Because of the consistent mistranslations, for example, it writes: ice and fire lake, or octagonal grass and fie apricot when its meant to me Ice and Fire Yin Yang Well and Octagon Mysterious Ice Grass, Infernal Delicate Apricot. Also, spirit douluo are referred to as 'contra' this only appears in mtl's of DD fanfics. Overall, not very good.

more chps please .........................

Reveal spoiler

Update !! Update !! Update !! Update !! Update !! Update !! Update !! Update !! Update !! Update !! Update !! Update !! Update !! Update !! Update !! Update !! Update !! Update !! Update !! Update !! Update !! Update !! Update !! Update !! Update !! Update !! Update !! Update !! Update !! Update !!