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waurpel
waurpelLv13yr
2021-07-16 09:24

So off the bat, the highligt of this story is trully the characters. They have a lot of personality and a very amusing dynamic! They complement each other perfectly. Now the writting quality could use a bit of work, nothing that completely cripples the story as a whole, but enough to stagger at times to understand what exactly is going on. Overall, an excellent story! I hope you keep going and make it even better!

Welcome To Terminus

Kandpalbhaskar010
4.6
87 Chs

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Sure dear.

3yr
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RoseOfBlues
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The concept of the story is cool and the exaggerations of the characters make it hilarious to watch. I totally love the funny dialogues and the way they are put. It is weird and yet nice to be in a game. I could visualise the apocalypse and all the things described in the book. I only wish that I hadn't felt overwhelmed by the sudden physical descriptions of the characters. Otherwise, the story is going great and has wonderful ideas to make it seem like the next Hunger Games. I wish you good luck, Author!

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Meg_Goodhope
Meg_GoodhopeLv1

I'm not done reading the entire chapters but I must say I love your choice of words. The saying '18-year-old child and 9-year-old adult' is so comical. The characters are built up very well that we got to see their addictions in the first chapter. Nice book author.

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Hotshot22
Hotshot22Lv13

I left a review on chapter 38 and thats my honest opinion. I lobe the ideas in this novel and hope it doesnt get dropped. Ill update my review if i see improvements.

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ARnab
ARnabLv2

The way of putting a 18 year old kid and a 9 year old man ooh just awesome concept, the humour was great too. An unique for for the genre, love to see where it goes

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Jo_J
Jo_JLv13

Dear Author, you had an intriguing concept for the story! The plot is interesting. I like the interactions between Matt and Ashton. I wonder who is a kid and who is an adult there... Well done!

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Starling_
Starling_Lv1

This was an enjoyable read! Some of the scenes hold solid humour, and the story seems to be developing rather quickly. The relationship between the two main characters and their home life was established quickly, which made their reactions to their circumstances further on realistic to the matter at hand. The writing could use some work. Oftentimes, it swaps from present to past tense, especially in descriptions and dialogue tags. This can be read over though, and the writing is easy to read. I like how quick the story is developing, and the system seems interesting as well. This book looks open to opportunity!

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Jia_K
Jia_KLv2

What I love about this story is that it moves forward at a nice pace and not sluggishly, which really grips my interest. I love the characters, both the boys are so relatable and funny. Keep it up!

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Omnitheus
OmnitheusLv3

Review After CH8 I liked the dynamic pair of the MCs. For a second, I thought one was created only for character development but re-read the synopsis. It is refreshing to see two MCs in an apocalyptic world. Has a The Last Of Us bond vibe. Keep up the good work.

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Lamelle
LamelleLv2

Interesting story. It hooked me from the start. Ashton is quite a character. At first I thought he was overly shameless but later he was just a crazy friend to little Matt. The story flows wonderfully also l liked the introduction to Terminus. The awakening was also portrayed nicely keep it up.

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