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DamnedChicken
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2023-05-21 16:54

Impeccable writing is a rarity in a web novel. But this story right here got that covered for you. The flow of sentences is natural, and the vocabulary is rich enough for the readers to enjoy it thoroughly, without being irritated by the unwanted repetitions. Though I haven't caught up to the latest chapters just yet. I think I have read enough to leave a review. I am a wandering reader, I don't care about genre or lead as long as the story is good. As such, I have to say, this story has one of the most interesting hooks In all of the novels I have ever read. Without a doubt, it easily comes into my top 5 FL stories. It is a melodramatic slice of life, a little serious at times with unforeseen twists and turns waiting at every corner. It was a treat to read for me from the very first chapter to the current 158th one. At last, I just want to thank the author for keeping this free. Now I want to catch up on this story as soon as possible.

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Photosphere
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Been a long time since I had such a good read. *Writing Quality: Excellent Delivery, although a little long, paragraphs are well structured, I'd usually not put myself more than a single dialogue per paragraph unless a dialogue it's accompanied by an inner monologue, but that's a personal preference, everything else is genuine, the story is easy to follow, there are no flamboyant terminologies that someone with average English can understand, 10/10. *Stability of Updates: It has a firm schedule, hence, 10/10. *Story Development: Surreal, it gives an accurate description of the background of the world, the royal court, the MC's status, how she lives and her feelings, it develops slowly into the promised premise (Become a fitting Queen) while giving it the surrealism of how actual monarchy would work, it's marvellous, 10/10. *Character Design: I have to say I was flabbergasted with the relationship between the family trio at the start of the series, never expected to identify myself with the FL to the point that I felt bad for her, after reading so much, such self-identification substance is lost, but I truly felt bad for her and hated the Empress to the core, in mere chapters, that speaks a lot of how characters are portrayed, their dialogues and the subtle details that speak louder than words and insults, still... here is where I find the only flaw in this novel, Devrim. His inclusion was too abrupt to the point it felt heterogeneous to the entire development prior, Aurora's reaction shouldn't have been to readily accept a candidate (even if she's choosing him herself) after having her mother reject her in such a way her entire life while her father was hopeless to protect her, she'd have trust issues. After her father, the only person that could salvage her, moved on, she'd enclose herself and trust no one, she'd eventually open her heart to Devrim and call him a friend, but perhaps after several tests acknowledge friendship, this is the only matter that ended up being 'surrealist' to me, compared to the rest of what I read. *World Background: Accurately described, the only thing I'd probably improve is to use the scenery description to boost the relevance of a scene, if a meeting is casual like spring and floating grass or as torrential as the rain which thunderstrikes, a dusty meeting with feelings in between, the atmosphere description will always enhance the perception of a scene, among other description such as geography and etc... which I can't touch upon as those depend of the scope of your novel. Overall, one of the best stories I have read on this site gave me a vibe of Les Miserables for some reason with the father being Jean Valjean, but that's my opinion. Best Regards!

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