I don't understand the logic of this fanfic. the author made a random orphan(I have no problem with them mind you) a no THE RIVAL to our mc who apparently has cheat similar to a system and is showing the mc as moron and wats more infuriating is that the mc is following the other kid like a lost puppy. This fanfic had sooo much potential but it was wasted it went down the drain just because author did not want the mc to be number 1 and give him a unrealistic rival and makes the protagonist dumb and stupid.

Just wanted to let people know that the last 6 comments seems to be from someone who wants to heavily lower the score of the fic. They were made in 30 min and some of them only have this single review with low stars. Report them. Review made at ch21: I don't think it was wise to spend all these chapters, where everyone is deciding if they want to read your story, in a rival and his Op pokemon (that we won't see again in 50 chapters) when your MC isn't even properly developed. I don't usually like or care about the MC having a rival for the same reason, you have to develop their character, summarize their adventure, their pokemon, and you have to make him an "equal" of the MC (so you have to make him special too), etc... and that takes a lot of chapters/words that I would have preferred to be about the MC having his own adventures and training his Pokemon. And it makes me resent rivals for that reason lol - I'm going to keep reading as there are not many high-quality Pokemon fics, as you seemed to be aiming for. I liked your world-building! Good job

I think this fan fiction has been rated terribly due to it being a bit slower compared to other ffs so here I am giving my own view on this ff. 5/5 The writing quality is decent not any major issues for reader, no glaring grammar mistakes. 5/5 The stability of updates is there I see 3 chapters a day, will see if this continues 3/5 The story development is decent in my opinion just the chapters are slow paced and themselves are small so it gives the illusion of the story being extremely slow. 4/5 The character design is decent and we can see the discrepency between the different characters but it can be more fleshed out. 4/5 I like the world background there's info about it laid around everywhere we can actually see a realistic Pokemon society from the words written but as I believe there's still more that can be added I will give 4/5

Story telling is okay, pace is slow but its an authors choice of direction, story plots seems to be a mash up of multiple different Pokémon fanfics such as "The Natural and Y'now nothing Jon Snow" from fanfiction net which is fine but the application in the story is some what forced into it without any background info or event pertaining such a situation may happen or is logical in any sense. Overall a fine read as long as you don't overthink everything and remember this is a fanfic, anything goes.

the rival thing is just dumb, i don't mind other people being stronger than the mc, but the rival has a cheat. and is more like the mc rather than rival, i suggest rewriting this

It is actually quite confusing FF. The beginning was quite interesting but later it became meh. may be later I will try it again, but for now the story is very confusing.

I’m confused who the MC of this fanfic is. It’s just trash. Letting other characters have high potential pokemon out of nowhere. It’s like he doesn’t know how to properly represent the potential of the pokemons. And he made that himself. What a waste. It has good potential, too.

now the story is getting interesting first i said that it was getting boring but after the volume 1 its starting to get good i really like the way the mc did not start his journey just yet unlike his friend which makes ts different from other fanfic.I like the Volume 2 a lot till now I HOPE IT GETS EVEN BETTER AS THE STORY PROGRESSES!!!!!!!

Fantastic Pokemon Fanfiction that does not rush the pace of the MC and has a pretty detailed and interesting storyline. Overall one of the best pokemon fanfics I have ever read!!!