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BlackHatLv53yr
2021-09-26 01:21

Basically, it's a mess. The author is incoherent and the translator keeps making mistake with pronouns he/she, his/her. For example, MC is supposed to to have a lvl 80 character however it has the stats of a lvl 1 noob. If the level doesn't increase stats (like in 99% of games/stories) then author needs to say what it's used for. Also, this is supposed to be a game that transformed into a reality and sometimes, author says MC and his character act like one but the next moment he talks about keyboards...

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JocomLv13

On webnovel the pronouns are pretty common issue I've seen that constantly... The grammar and sentence structure dies minute one when non professional writers write in languages they don't fully understand. I haven't read this story yet so that's about as far as my opinion will go...

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