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jeanpierregerardo
jeanpierregerardoLv53yr
2021-07-05 09:11

-good history. -it would be interesting a * fem of harry potter = henrieta *. -and do not leave the story, there were others of harry potter where they begin as brothers of hermanioni (some or half always hate hermanioni for silly reasons xD). -I hope you include girls like (daphne and her sister who in the original was married to an old man, ginerva wesley, cho chang, susan bones, fleur delacour and her sister, Luna lovegood. the twins, among others who did not are mentioned a lot).

Am I not a diviner in potterverse, ok? Ah, look I am!

KuroBastard69
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KuroBastard69
KuroBastard69Author

Yo reader-san Thanks for feedback and I really like your ideas but... I've got a memory that Astoria Greengrass marry with Draco Malfoy at cannon

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jeanpierregerardo
jeanpierregerardoLv5

bruh, just do the 'Au o Ua' world to not worry about little things, it's more interesting if you do different from the original

KuroBastard69:Yo reader-san Thanks for feedback and I really like your ideas but... I've got a memory that Astoria Greengrass marry with Draco Malfoy at cannon
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jeanpierregerardo
jeanpierregerardoLv5

and what he got married was only at the end (only because his father wants him to marry a pure blood, the same with his sister who was forced to marry an old man (without mentioning that she is sick), and with the introduction of your protagonist and the change of hermanioni you already changed everything, maybe nothing is the same (simple reason that you can add to daphne and others girls.).

KuroBastard69:Yo reader-san Thanks for feedback and I really like your ideas but... I've got a memory that Astoria Greengrass marry with Draco Malfoy at cannon
3yr
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KuroBastard69
KuroBastard69Author

Yeah. The potterverse already change because my OC is not happy let his girl follow to the danger

jeanpierregerardo:and what he got married was only at the end (only because his father wants him to marry a pure blood, the same with his sister who was forced to marry an old man (without mentioning that she is sick), and with the introduction of your protagonist and the change of hermanioni you already changed everything, maybe nothing is the same (simple reason that you can add to daphne and others girls.).
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KuroBastard69
KuroBastard69Author

Must be impossible the Golden trio now because of this. Even that don't stop Mione He'll make all risks nulls

KuroBastard69:Yeah. The potterverse already change because my OC is not happy let his girl follow to the danger
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doom6561
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Your Picture made me think she cast a spell called boobicus biggis

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