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WuxiFan
WuxiFanLv103yr
2021-07-11 15:52

This is a good story. Obvious pros are this is a system novel, a good one at that. Things that might annoy you include, repeated redundant sentences and spelling mistakes. The story seems solid plot-wise so far. Hope to see more of Jack Lyre.

Spaceships And Magic, What Could Possibly Go Wrong?

MattHarris
4.5
176 Chs

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MattHarris
MattHarrisAuthor

Really sorry about the spelling mistakes, I thought I'd managed to iron most of those out. Some of the repeated sentences were for dramatic effect (like the scene with the scene in the first chapter), but since they didn't really land I won't be doing those so much anymore! I'm really glad you think this is a good system novel, though!

3yr
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MattHarris
MattHarrisAuthor

Hi, I'm the author! Below you will see reviews claiming this story was marked and completed and finished in an unsatisfying way. This was true for a time but I reached out to my editor, had it changed back to serealizing, and am now writing the story once more... so please do join in reading from the start if you would like! Jacob Lyre's story is still ongoing!

1yr

ltsArcane
ltsArcaneLv2

What can I say? The book was amazing. The plot had a wonderful set of twists, and the implementation of it was spicy. Jacob Lyre, the main character, is your average Joe and he plays that role well. He makes mistakes and has to deal with the consequences of overconfidence, rash thinking, and taking an optimistic rather than pessimistic, or realistic perspective. I think the world-building of this story is better than other stories—it's not too little nor too much. In certain chapters, more details could be needed for certain situations, but how the author decides to do so is up to him. Perhaps in certain situations, fewer details are better than usual. (Although, something such as describing the misty atmosphere or the rusted piping, showing how Jacob is heading into a more industrial area. It is the little details that help readers appreciate the story more.) The pacing is a bit too hectic for my liking, but so be it. Some stories work better if they move faster. (At least you aren't pulling a Psychic Parasite and having the main character finally start taking action by the 30th chapter, whereas the past 30 were delineating everyone's lives BUT the main characters and eventually killing them off/making them useless at the end.) And to cap it all off, we have a snarky and cocky "system" which "reflects Jacob's personality", providing comic relief in dire situations. Honestly, I love this twist. Jacob's thinking and behavior are shown through the system, along with his personality, and the possibility of future character development is allowed, both for Jacob and the system. Despite that, BB (the system) shines brighter than the main character at some points, such as providing critical information, with the limitation that he can't do much during combat (due to restrictions imposed by synchro mode). Although the system tends to lead Jacob by the leash with the rewards for emergency quests, there are no dire failure rewards, such as the cliché "Failure: You die." moments. The plot armor consists of "Emergency Quests", unique rewards, and random encounters, while Jacob is being ignorant (but we don't talk about that. That's bound to happen within any story, so deal with it, you critics.) It's a great story all in all. From the plot, setting, characters, and abilities, to the snarky system and events that occur within the story. Well worth reading! I'm still at the beginning of chapter 33, so I'll be updating this if there's any noteworthy changes.

3yr
The_Argent_Raven
The_Argent_RavenLv10

***IMPORTANT READ THIS*** Don't pick this novel up because it was axed. For more explanation see below. Although it was axed by author, they did put an ending but it skips over basically the entire novel of it was finished. Also in my opinion, it kinda sucked a lot. World background was great but the story felt rushed in a lot of areas. Some ideas were not very good though. For example, the Guard, an intergalactic military organization devoted to peacekeeping is not thought out too well. The selection process is too much, it seemed more like a selection process to join the most elite Special Forces unit.

3yr
Thee_AngryBird
Thee_AngryBirdLv5

an interesting read.. not bad 🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥

3yr
dragonslayernjd
dragonslayernjdLv12

book is good, it could be wayyy better if the author fleshed out the world more and instead of a fast paced story, changed it to a slow paced story. story has a lot of potential

3yr
Edytra
EdytraLv5

This story is interesting, there are a real reason for the powerful, and mysterious "System" which we always know in each Isekai Novel. Here, the System was something that integrated from the start and the MC know its existence and together they are going for the strongest.

3yr
CarbonMonarch
CarbonMonarchLv15

Honestly this is a really good novel and it seems to be doing fine but I finally made it to chapter 175 and it just skips over years of progress to the last fight why did u end the novel so prematurely it was just getting good

3yr
Loneliness_Lover
Loneliness_LoverLv4

Brilliantly written. I finished reading the first 9 chapters immediately, as the story hooked me up instantly. Waiting for more..❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️

3yr
DurojaiyeAdedayo
DurojaiyeAdedayoLv3

from the synopsis alone you can already tell that the book is something that's worth your time. I always enjoy books that have a good grammatical structure and this book excels in that area. The storyline is an interesting one. Keep up the good work author.

3yr
ElaryWakefield
ElaryWakefieldLv11

FIRST! o3o okay, here we go! This is a story I can get right into. It is compelling and interesting, they do a great job of setting up the first scene. I have to read more. The story is a bit of a sad one I feel but that just makes it even better! Keep it up!

3yr
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