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2021-07-08 18:56

From the very start the first thing I liked was the descriptions used. They were vibrant enough for me to easily imagine what was happening in the story but the formatting was a bit chunky. Perhaps smaller paragraphs would help as the big ones may be a bit exhausting to readers. The MC also seems like your average joe, but has been given a literally once in a lifetime opportunity to reincarnate. though the entity that does that for him seems different to our common gods that appear benevolent, making me think what more could be there to them. The world background also seems pretty good and I would like to continue reading to know more about it.

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MattHarris
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Thank you so much for your review! I hear what you're saying about the paragraph length and will look to perhaps modify that in the future.

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