Review Detail of ScarletCore in The game of revenge
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Honest opinion, this story is an open book. The opening chapters don’t seem to flow very well, especially with the dialogues swapping from “ to : every so often. The tenses also become mixed up, and too many characters are show at once, creating confusion. Otherwise, the plot of the novel is being unpacked fast and I like how the author has gone on to address the sci-if genre. It’s good if you ignore the punctuation and style errors.
The game of revenge
Maryam_Zahoor
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When I’m on my pc a little later, I’ll comment under the chapters with the strange dialogue tags and tense switches. Otherwise, your Grammar is quite good. Right now, the beginning was just a lot to take in. To make the story flow better, I would suggest spacing them out, and using more conjunctions ( although, which, but ). Hope this helps
Maryam_Zahoor:Thanks Scarlet for sharing your honest opinion so I can make my story better. Can you please suggest how can I modify this problem now? or Which thing irritates you most means at which point you felt there's so many characters?