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ELLOMYGELLOLv153yr
2021-08-29 18:13

Ive read this story to chapter 91 but i have to say the quality is good spelling and all that but reading this story gave me wip lash there is no real constant story to it everything changes and there is almost no link to the flow of the story caracters are half flushed i feel if the author could pick a direction in the story and stick with it and work on the caracters they could make a amazing story with their creativity but as this story is its almost as if its 4 stories half a.s.sedly stuffed together not to mention the random skips that unnecessarily jump time to progress plot where there was more to be shown and would of made the story far better with the detail at witch the story sorely lacks id rate this lower totally but the quality of the general writing was good and it seems to update often its the content of the story that lacks any real value and if the author can fix that could be a amazing writer as its the main part of any story

Transmigrated as side character, i will steal all the heroines

Rysangel
4.3
355 Chs

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Rysangel
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Hi, guys Rysangel here. Please read my two other novels too, and give some feedback. Should I continue to write that in a serious mood or should I make a new story with a more light-hearted comedic tone?

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BrabbitX
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Mc is a slave to the system. Mc is a slave to the system.Mc is a slave to the system.Mc is a slave to the system.Mc is a slave to the system.Mc is a slave to the system. I have read 0 chapters and will never even try this. Mc is a slave to the system.

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Fly2Sky
Fly2SkyLv4

disgusted by the system and the dumb MC............................................................. . .. . .. .. . .. ,............... Б

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Cosmicanalog
CosmicanalogLv10

Even getting to 40 is a great achievement, I'm having a nervous breakdown while reading, mc's stupidity and the system's horror punishments, the system and mc's speeches are hilarious, it's disgusting[img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]

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IOnlyReadNTRHentai
IOnlyReadNTRHentaiLv10

damm. This is a really beautiful novel that has a very light comedy tone. The author played the story very well from the first few chapters alone. The other people might be annoyed by the system because it just exists for comedy purposes. The system is like a rebellious teenager. That is just my first impression of this novel. Just great.

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rodrigo_melo
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i refuse to read stupid dialogs between the system and the protagonista, there is 2 things i hate the most: Plaina protagonist and system. I could no bare read more than 3 chapters because of this anoying system, It is the most unfunny thing i've seen in a novel till now.

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N0B0DY3
N0B0DY3Lv5

Reveal spoiler

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DolanTramp
DolanTrampLv2

Sigh.. i wanted to give this one a try due to the good reviews (i didnt look at the comment section yet) So i tried reading a bit and i only read half a chapter and couldn´t bear it to read it anymore. And thats coming from someone thats able to withstand reading mtl´s. The author makes quite alot of mistakes, about 5 in that half chapter. Not only that, i saw that the "protagonist" basicly added a few "!!!" to every sentence of his and his stupid decision at the start so i knew the mental age and eq of the mc and realized that he would annoy me, coming from someone that can live through young master cultivation novels, so i stopped reading this novel. Afterwards i saw the horrible top reviews from this novel and had no idea how this novel has such good reviews..

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ProfessorofCulture
ProfessorofCultureLv14

bad grammar..................................................................................................................................

3yr
Divine_Onahole
Divine_OnaholeLv3

this book cant be enjoy to normal human..i lost my braincell reading this book..cant pased chapter 5..the system and the mc super anoying. super retard

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