Review Detail of Mythril_Blade in Advent of Chaos
Review detail
As you probably read from the other reviews, the writing quality does get better. Just power through it and you'll get to the really good parts. There are a few things that came to my attention though. The first would be the terrible synopsis you have written. I mean seriously, you get no information out of this. And Please Put More Words In Each Line Anyway, the story is pretty interesting. A dude who gets reincarnated into Tensura and gets OP real fast is always a good combination in my books. He also goes into other universes too. (Danmachi, highschool of the dead and Campione or whatever it's called) The MC is a crazy and cold blooded killer, so be aware of that. Being calm and nonchalant when committing genocide kind of crazy, to be specific. I like it but some don't. To each their own I guess. Just give it a try if you're interested and don't get discouraged by the worse grammar in the first few chapters, trust me it truly gets better.
Advent of Chaos
Pure_R18_Terror
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Nah, I meant the synopsis. Could've been only half as long if you hadn't used a whole line for one sentence or a few words. Just mentioned it so it doesn't get carried over if you ever decide to redo the synopsis.
Pure_R18_Terror:what do you mean by each line, the dialogues or the paragraph length?
Mythril_Blade:Nah, I meant the synopsis. Could've been only half as long if you hadn't used a whole line for one sentence or a few words. Just mentioned it so it doesn't get carried over if you ever decide to redo the synopsis.
Pure_R18_Terror:oh I was sorta worried if the character dialogues felt lifeless or something
Mythril_Blade:Don't worry, they aren't. They're pretty lively imo
Pure_R18_Terror:lol after reading this through closely several times to stroke my almost non-existent ego, I realized one mistake. Don't you think he'd be breathing like a pervert after commiting genocide?
it's more along the lines of him being a warmonger with no care about the consequences of his actions on the people.
Shaska:the MC is a genocide who kills people, whether they are innocent or not? I do not care if he kills his enemies, but another thing is that he is massacring a population that has nothing to do with his things.
Pure_R18_Terror:it's more along the lines of him being a warmonger with no care about the consequences of his actions on the people.