Review Detail of Crystillia in My Inner Ability System

Reviewing the first few chapters of My Inner Ability System, the potential inherent in this series is clear to see. Unlike a plethora of system Light novels, the obtaining and using of the system isnt mixed into a fantastical/hyper advanced world, at least not immediately, with abilities being more under the radar than pure fantasy realms. This could tie into future possible plot points of morality, when using such abilities on ordinary humans, and conflicts with other secret ability users. The main character Obed has some foundational build up as someone who is curious, calm, and hardworking, and I look forward to further development with the character. Some things that I would say are holding My inner ability system back include: The lack of better Punctuation in the early chapters, which makes readers slog through chapters that aren't the easiest to grasp and understand because of the punctuation, capital letters, speech marks etc. Though these are improved in the later part of the series, it would be best to fix the first few chapters, either parralell to writing new episodes, or in an hiatus. This same mindset can be applied to the synopsis, but to a lesser degree. I'd say that, to improve your synopsis, it'd be a good idea to ask someone whose prose you find very good, to help you re-work it. Well done though, keep up the good work.