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Crystillia

Crystillia

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I love reading a lot and I mean a lot.

2020-09-30 JoinedGlobal
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  • Crystillia
    Crystillia1d
    Commented

    That’s a really cool word.

    "Eqlicent (synonym of bullseye) " I said, after which his killing intent receded back into his body and he removed the knife from my neck.
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    Rise Of The Infinite Sovereign
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  • Crystillia
    Crystillia1d
    Commented

    Physics-psychics

    Physics use mana to increase their mental capabilities.
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    Rise Of The Infinite Sovereign
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  • Crystillia
    Crystillia1d
    Commented

    Sir Frederick’s already one of my fav ourite characters

    Ch 13 Hellish Ordeal
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    Rise Of The Infinite Sovereign
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  • Crystillia
    Crystillia1d
    Commented

    Mssionary to missionar y

    'He said he was the son of a merchant, and that he left home at the prime age of twenty, and traveled to the Hellison continent, where he was unknown, before registering the Silencers Guild in the first Mssionary he came across'
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    Rise Of The Infinite Sovereign
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  • Crystillia
    Crystillia11d
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    If there’s one way to describe this book, it’d simply be to say that it defies expectations. The introduction to this book is one of the greatest I’ve ever read. Not in light novels. Not in Manga. Ever. The chapter title, I was a fool, the portrayal of the intense emotional distress was going through, shown by the great description done through the spectacular prose. Focusing on the prose, the third person perspective is clearly spectacular. The descriptions of each character’s feeling throughout a scene or a timeframe(the other knights when facing Kevin in the first scene of war, still fearful of a bleeding out lion) or (Ezra’s mother bursting into his room with more anxiousness then a child waiting for a Christmas present, with none of the joy, but all of the fear inherent with a child of her own being caused any pain), are extremely well done, and the character introductions and humour have loads of merit. This is one I’ll be a reader of for a long time.

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    Rise Of The Infinite Sovereign
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  • Crystillia
    Crystillia6mth
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    Reviewing the first few chapters of My Inner Ability System, the potential inherent in this series is clear to see. Unlike a plethora of system Light novels, the obtaining and using of the system isnt mixed into a fantastical/hyper advanced world, at least not immediately, with abilities being more under the radar than pure fantasy realms. This could tie into future possible plot points of morality, when using such abilities on ordinary humans, and conflicts with other secret ability users. The main character Obed has some foundational build up as someone who is curious, calm, and hardworking, and I look forward to further development with the character. Some things that I would say are holding My inner ability system back include: The lack of better Punctuation in the early chapters, which makes readers slog through chapters that aren't the easiest to grasp and understand because of the punctuation, capital letters, speech marks etc. Though these are improved in the later part of the series, it would be best to fix the first few chapters, either parralell to writing new episodes, or in an hiatus. This same mindset can be applied to the synopsis, but to a lesser degree. I'd say that, to improve your synopsis, it'd be a good idea to ask someone whose prose you find very good, to help you re-work it. Well done though, keep up the good work.

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    My Inner Ability System
    Fantasy · LegalWolf
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  • Crystillia
    Crystillia6mth
    Posted

    A review of the first chapter. The first chapter clearly achieves two things: charachterisation of the main charachter, and a foundational understanding of the underlying worldbuiling of werewolves and humans, with how each society intergrates(or doesnt) with each other. For improvement, I would suggest either emphasising the mystery of the werewolves existence, if thats something you plan to focus on, or give the readers more insight into the male’s protagonist’s perspective. Well done though

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    Being The Alpha Don's Lover
    Contemporary Romance · Poetic_reviver
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  • Crystillia
    Crystillia9mth
    Posted

    I really like this writer's style of writing. Though there are mistakes, they are minimal, with the rest of it being very clean. The introduction to the world is sharp, with no tomfoolering to the point. The introducing of main points that this world shall center on is well done. The design of the mc is also pretty sharp, with the only problem being that genericity might overwhelm him compared to other charachters, but as of now, only five chapters are out, giving you loads of time to improve that. The world is good enough so far for a story like this, but I would reccomend fleshing it out more, not just the parts of an adventurer. The name of the book/world is probably best as a placeholder and not the final name. Good work.

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    RPG Online
    Video Games · Yonko_master
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  • Crystillia
    Crystillia9mth
    Posted

    What an intresting way to introduce our main charachter. This novel has good potential.I’d say the best way to uncover it is to ask someone to help you polish the chapters, probably an editor, to show what greatness this has to offer.It’ll be intresting to see where it goes.

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    the love of imperatrix (Spare Copy)
    Contemporary Romance · Devanshi_Rathod
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  • Crystillia
    Crystillia9mth
    Commented

    Susukuchi? Is that you?

    "Agh..." cried the man, whose neck was clutched by Ms. Danica ( owner of CR Marketing Company)
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    The Love of Imperatrix
    Contemporary Romance · Devanshi_Rathod
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  • Crystillia
    Crystillia9mth
    Posted

    I was quickly gripped by this book. The mc is one that in all honesty you just want to hug, with all the stuff that she has been through. I cant wait to see the magic more fleshed out. Your writing quality’s flaws because of original language dont pop up often enough to distract from the story. Its a collection for me. One thing though, the title you have, though it explains the center of the story, can be passed off as any light novel doing something similar, while I personally think that this book has better content then most of the rest. A collection for me.

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    My Man Is A Villain, So Am I!
    Fantasy Romance · Soun_Phavin
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  • Crystillia
    Crystillia9mth
    Commented

    Sewing backpacks is relateable on a deep level

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    My Man Is A Villain, So Am I!
    Fantasy Romance · Soun_Phavin
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  • Crystillia
    Crystillia10mth
    Commented

    GrIef....... This world is getting more intriguing

    Ch 2 The Same Jiff , A Million Times.
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    3 hours - A Gamble Of Time.
    Sci-fi · Gaureeey
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  • Crystillia
    Crystillia10mth
    Commented

    Thats An intense love. Devotion is clear. If the point wasnt emphasised enough, there it is.

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    3 hours - A Gamble Of Time.
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  • Crystillia
    Crystillia10mth
    Replied to Devilcraft_42

    Thanks devilcraft

    Gusts from beating wings, bullets of wind spray from its mouth. A humanoid figure walks out of the lapping flames, eyes devoid of humanity, and an endless void. The smell of death was all around it, with it almost being plausible to the soul. Face continually warping
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    Pursuit of Salvation
    Fantasy · Crystillia
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  • Crystillia
    Crystillia11mth
    Posted

    Completely clean writing. In my opinion, worthy of publishing. Much respect to the author.

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    The Isle of Guardians
    Fantasy Romance · d_nmalory
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  • Crystillia
    Crystillia11mth
    Replied to d_nmalory

    Lets just act like that didnt happen....

    Ch 1 Pursuit of Salvation: Blood
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    Pursuit of Salvation
    Fantasy · Crystillia
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  • Crystillia
    Crystillia11mth
    Posted

    Author here. Hope u enjoy my three chapter short story.

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    Pursuit of Salvation
    Fantasy · Crystillia
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  • Crystillia
    Crystillia11mth
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    This seems to be a standard cultivation novel. However I'd like to point out some of its great qualities. For this genre, a first person perspective is very unique. The lore is very well developed, that can be seen throughout the detailed text. Also, I've never seen the sound effect, Tud Tud Tud. Well done author.

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    MARTIAL ANCIENT ERA: Strongest Body Ancient Cultivation
    Martial Arts · shifu7
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  • Crystillia
    Crystillia11mth
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    For goodness sake, murder mystery is one of my favourite book genres. The way you do speech is like a drama script, which is pretty curious to see, but its pretty good. For improvement, I’d say make the flow of your descriptions more clean wIth techniques like group of three adjectives, similies and And metaphors etc. Dont overuse them though. You are doing well.

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    THE 7TEEN: LET THE PAIN EXIST
    Horror&Thriller · Adwaid_Nambiar
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