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val_the_mysterious
val_the_mysteriousLv133yr
2021-06-27 08:53

Enjoying the story so far! World building is still foggy, there isn’t a clear explination on the differences in hair and eye color, but its also still early in the storyline. Writing is good, characters are enjoyable. I feel for Lilith and what shes having to deal with. Can’t wait to see how the story progresses. Magenta better watch out!

GREASE

halfblinde
4.8
10 Chs

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halfblinde
halfblindeAuthor

Thank goi for your review! <3 I’ll try my best to improve the worldbuilding!

3yr
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halfblinde
halfblindeAuthor

I’m going to support my own work and say that it’s worth a read! I’m a native english speaker, so the grammar isn’t half bad. I try to stick to conventional means of dialogue as well. The worldbuilding might be a little choppy, but the characters memorable and likable. Please give this novel a chance! (:

3yr

star_dreamer
star_dreamerLv3

Welps! This story is so mysterious and intriguing. The plot is so unique and engaging. The writing is realistic and hilarious at times. Definitely a good read, do try it! Kudos author, for a job well done!

3yr
Itsuki_Suzuki
Itsuki_SuzukiLv3

Writing Quality: Good and readable Updating Stability: Superb and always updated! Story Development: Nice pacing Character Design: It's nice and clean World Background: Had enough to engage more chapters.

3yr
Adwaid_Nambiar
Adwaid_NambiarLv1

Writer has done a great job at this novel, its very engaging. And main character is really interesting. Dialogues are also very well written and funny. There aren't much chapters at this time but even with limited chapters it's a really good read. And I am looking forward to upcoming chapters.

3yr
SEP1A
SEP1ALv10

I’ve had this novel in my library, desperately waiting to review it. I am in love with the story’s cover! It reminds me of a book from my childhood (painted me in nostalgia, a fine thing in my opinion). Reading the story, I can almost feel the author’s brain working to produce this fine piece of art. By Chapter Three, I was assured that this was a lovely story. Your use of descriptives is absolutely amazing, my favourite line being “mismatched colours and worn out clothing and carpet” or a line to that extent. Brilliant imagery 💚 I would only suggest to go at a more moderate pace (faster) in order for the reader to constantly be engaged in your story. However, this is totally up to you - your world is under your control ✨

3yr
kuhaku_sora
kuhaku_soraLv3

The writing style and plot is very engaging and immersive! The main protagonist is really funny at times (especially the dialogue!) Definitely will keep this inside my library~

3yr
REaper
REaperLv4

Well, a new and interesting concept, since the novel has just started it can be developed into a very interesting read. Hoping for the best author.

3yr
Proteety_Promi
Proteety_PromiLv3

The story has potential. It's well written with a smooth pace which is a plus point. Though I think the synopsis can be improved if you work on it. It's just my opinion. Feel free to disagree.

3yr
ItsAll_Lost
ItsAll_LostLv1

Pretty good for a first chapter! So far the story flow allows me to be curious about what might happen next. Im not quite sure about the rules of the world and its entirety but im sure you’ll be able to deliver all the answers to my questions! Keep writing! Im looking forward to future chapters :))

3yr
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