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(Aw My review got deleted by webnovel ;() As much as I want to give this a 1 l won't be biased just because I hate what happened in the latest chapters. Writing Quality(5)- Really Good. Unless you go around reading every word twice you'll rarely find a mistake. Story Development (2)- Now this is very complicated. Consider this as a little spoiler but this would decide whether you read it or not. The Start was great and all but the arc with the mother Tang (m*lf) was too long but I didn't dislike it too much since I thought you wanted to flesh them out. Which could be considered good as long it's not too long. But The RanRan situation was F**ked.You played the whole situation out very poorly. I understood the motives behind it but the way you described it in detail in the next chapter after 'It's Time To Be A Hero'. You could just show she was struggling, not touched or the way you described then it wouldn't have been much of a problem even though it was concerning for the personality of the MC. Character Design(2)- MC- Hypocritical and disgusting. Letting your future girl be molested is only something the fans of (ne.torase) would enjoy. Even her mother didn't make it stop beside her weak attempts. What a tr*sh mother. I'm interested in what her reaction would be when she would find out that her lover (step-father) could stop all of it from happening and her mother was slightly involved in it too. That is if you don't turn her b r a i n d e a d. Updating Stability(5)- You seem to upload daily. World Background(5)- I Usually give this a 5 for fanfictions. Overall 3.8 but I won't be reading any further since the MC is not to my tastes. If anyone isn't bothered by the long arc and the whole RanRan situation then you can read this without any worries, Since a few people in the comments seem to be defending the author then there might be more out there that aren't bothered by it. Good Luck With The Fic.

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