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esohul29
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2021-10-15 21:40

dear writer I love your way of thinking when you write but there are still a lot of things you need to work on; like the space in between the sentences; I for one like your R18 mindset [img=recommend] I feel that there are some characters which need to be be killed (su); however it's feeling a bit slow in terms of getting too the 2yrs before she 18yrs [img=update] this is my view so far on your book. I hope you continue and give us more [img=update]

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fairytail72
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Don’t worry I won’t take that long

esohul29
esohul29Lv14

thank you

fairytail72:Don’t worry I won’t take that long
Rico_Porogoy
Rico_PorogoyLv2

Author, Please do remember your the author, wrote what you see fit in your novel....will I too do hope for more exciting scene 😂. Can't even what when she's 18 gosh.....I was kind of looking for more😁

fairytail72:Don’t worry I won’t take that long
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moondark
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This is an awesome story and I’m really enjoying it. It deals with a shared wife between 5 brothers and focuses on the relationships between the wife and each of the brothers. Along the way, both the wife and all the brothers deal with past baggage and learn how to heal with the help of the others. The story also touches on some darker aspects of relationships but personally I don’t think it’s gotten that dark or twisted yet. At most, maybe a little racy, which I’m all for. The world building is cohesive and the writing is logical and flows well. Some grammatical errors but not too bad. The romance is really sweet and sometimes sexy. Which I appreciate personally. The characters are well-rounded and have their own back stories which develop as the storyline progresses. I’m reading another one of the authors stories and I think she has potential to grow way past the Webnovel platform. It seems like most of her stories try to take a deeper look at the psychological issues underlying a lot of the things people feel, say, and do. For a young author this is pretty admirable. Now to address the white elephant in the room. Early on there were a few accusations of plagiarism or at least copying the storyline of another story of a shared wife between brothers. I’d already read the story and the comic of this other book. At first there were a lot of similarities and a few scenes that were very similar. The characters themselves were a bit similar. But after maybe 40 chapters or so, this book completely diverged from the other. And I mean completely. The characters developed in completely different ways and the story is totally different. The only similarity at this point is that brothers are sharing a wife. So while this other book might have influenced the author as a starting point, she has absolutely made this story her own. In fact, I think this story is much better with much more depth to the characters and the plot. So, no, this isn’t a plagiarized story by any means.

Anayatzin13
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SPOILERS!! I found so many similarities in the story like in ‘Sweet Rustic Love‘ however there are so many differences as well and to be honest i like this story line way more so far. At first i fell in love withe SRL but now that I’m reading this i like this story line and characters better. Similarities: Transigration of fl from a modern world. Both woke up to be married as a shared wife. One husand is a hunter, one seems like a flirt, one is limping and stuttering, and one is a tsundere. Both Mls and Fls families are leeches. Both fls are young so husbands need to wait until shes a bit more mature in body. Both fls rely on their past to make money and their lives beter. A few more similarities as well that i might have forgotten. Differences: SRL has 4 ml while this story has 5. One husband here is aiming to become a scholar. The husband who is a tsundere is different in the fact that hes not violent like the one is SRL. When the Fl transmigrated in SRL the original panicked and ran away which caused the tsundere husand to be over bearing and thinking she’ll try to run away if shes not within sight. He also had violent tendencies and shouts although he didnt lay a hand on her. Here fl was so bad ass after transmigation. Although theres a scholar here the one that was more educated in SRL is the tsundere one so the mls have a lot of similarities but its like their traits are spread out between them which makes them a bit different. Also i like that here the mls dont have a problem asking about how the wedding night will work out they are more open. The fls are both a bit over bearing but if im honest this fl is way better because shes not so demanding and gives in to them when shes in the wrong. Here the mls have their mom as the only good family. In SRL mls have an aunty and uncle. Fl here has family to rely on plus her mom left her a dowry and can rely on her shops to make money plus the hot spring they found in their new home. In SRL her parents let her grandma sell her off so fl had to rely on her modern world memories to make money and thats how they build their home and collaborated with a store in town to make money from her designs. I’m sure theres more that I forgot. This fl in my opinion is more gentle and compassionate her personality is on the kinder side with the family she readily accepted. Shes understanding of her husbands and more open to try and make their relationship work. Unlike in SRL shes more mature when it comes to being intimate with her husands, yes she set rules and boundaries but shes also playful and funny with her wolf like thoughts in wanting to devour her husbands 🤣🤭 Shes not a virgin in thoughts, although she cant have sex with them yet we have seen so far that she will help with the ‘heat’ without feeling shy and that she doesnt mind teasing and taking responsibility for her actions instead of letting them up and dry. Also love how she takes care of her mother in law and the fact that the story starts with her life before transmigrating. Sorry it turned out way longer than i wanted but I’m really in love with this story so far.

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