Review Detail of Aeternabilis in A Reincarnated Tale : Pokémon
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The major problem with this is how you have gone about the love life of the mc. If you did it naturally and made them come together organically cool. However, you are talking about it as if they are trophies to pick and choose from (the mc) This is a 30-year-old planning to win a 5-year-olds heart before even meeting her... If they met and got together great but the fact he has to plan about it etc rly turns me off of the story. Another, thing this adds into is just how the mc dialogs with himself way too much to the point I am just skimming through parts to acc get to the point he was talking about. Waffling to much. SO yeah
A Reincarnated Tale : Pokémon
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Thanks for the review! Sure it may seem that way, but that's because I decided on Serena being the main wife of this fanfic from the stsrt, instead of him being indecisive. What's wrong with having mc plan it out? Did you forget how easily Setena fell in love with Ash? All mc is trying to do is prevent them from meeting together. Ash saved Serena from a potential poliwag attack, helped her knee injury and carried her back. Ash won't be doing that here. As for MC monologing a lot, yeah that's the style of this fanfic. I'm making it first person, and I have comedy tag on it soooo Idk lol.
I don't know what you think is morally right or not but that's child grooming, and if you don't see anything wrong with that then you seriously need help by having a conversation with a therapist.
Aht:Thanks for the review! Sure it may seem that way, but that's because I decided on Serena being the main wife of this fanfic from the stsrt, instead of him being indecisive. What's wrong with having mc plan it out? Did you forget how easily Setena fell in love with Ash? All mc is trying to do is prevent them from meeting together. Ash saved Serena from a potential poliwag attack, helped her knee injury and carried her back. Ash won't be doing that here. As for MC monologing a lot, yeah that's the style of this fanfic. I'm making it first person, and I have comedy tag on it soooo Idk lol.
Aht:Thanks for the review! Sure it may seem that way, but that's because I decided on Serena being the main wife of this fanfic from the stsrt, instead of him being indecisive. What's wrong with having mc plan it out? Did you forget how easily Setena fell in love with Ash? All mc is trying to do is prevent them from meeting together. Ash saved Serena from a potential poliwag attack, helped her knee injury and carried her back. Ash won't be doing that here. As for MC monologing a lot, yeah that's the style of this fanfic. I'm making it first person, and I have comedy tag on it soooo Idk lol.
Aht:Thanks for the review! Sure it may seem that way, but that's because I decided on Serena being the main wife of this fanfic from the stsrt, instead of him being indecisive. What's wrong with having mc plan it out? Did you forget how easily Setena fell in love with Ash? All mc is trying to do is prevent them from meeting together. Ash saved Serena from a potential poliwag attack, helped her knee injury and carried her back. Ash won't be doing that here. As for MC monologing a lot, yeah that's the style of this fanfic. I'm making it first person, and I have comedy tag on it soooo Idk lol.