The story is really adorable~ especially the dialogue! It doesn't feel forced or cringey unlike any other novels! I was really hooked by the progression of the chapter! However, I do like to note about the switching of perspective. You could swtich perspectives to dig deeper through the characters, but try limiting it for a couple of chapters. It is advisable to focus at a single character until it's necessary to be inside another character for the next plotline. There are also a lot of lowercased letters that should be in capitlised form and missing commas. For an example : "Hey, Zeke!" and "You don't have to force yourself a smile, Clover." Adding these small things would ensure the smooth sailing experience of us readers reading your book~ Hope it helps!
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Thank you for the detailed review! I’ll take note of it since im not too good with when to add commas- but ill try and make my story better!!
