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2021-06-29 07:00

This story has great potential. I recommend Grammarly for the author though, it helps a lot. I like Chase's vibe...I like to imagine him as a south korean though...LOL. I'm a fan of banter too...keep on writing

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This story is quite intriguing. 😌 Review Proper after reading the latest chapter 17 release. Writing Quality. The narratives were easy to read and understand. Though, there are a few g-mistakes it improves as the story progressed in the latest chapters. (I also put up some suggestions, hope that helps. Oh, and another thing check out your tenses, sometimes you kept reverting from past then present tenses in some paragraphs, I could mention some if you wanted.) Stability of Updates. I won't comment on this. Just take your time honing each of your chapters. Quality > Quantity. Story Development. So far I enjoyed the development so far with a lot of surprising twists put by the author. I love how the story moves forward with Charles trying to catch Z, then Z trying to go on with his mission (well, I won't spoil much other than this 😌). For the romance between the leads, I've still not seen not much yet so far but it's alright, since the author were able to build up a lot of "wanting" for the readers for the two to finally meet up rather than a few chance encounters. Each chapter, I really look forward for them to finally meet up longer 🤭 Character Design. The main characters are all well crafted and they distinguish very well to each other. Even the supporting ones, you will emphathy and laugh with them, I enjoyed Kira's personality lol. World Background. Well detailed. Overall, this book is really has a potential for its genre. I hope it will turn better especially with the romance of the two leads and not become some other bl's out there with rushed development. This book is greatly recommended, if you love to read a story with a real development that the author really put thoughts on writing, then this story is for you. This is why it gets 5/5 to me because of the development so far. 🥰 Keep it up, author! This will stay in my colls and look out for more updates 🙏😌🥰.

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