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deadly_orange
deadly_orangeLv133yr
2021-08-09 01:42

Its honestly a really good story mc stays pretty consistent, considering its webnovel the author has really good grammar. You can tell that the characters at least resemble the originals. Toga was the first confirmed love interest and Toga is one of my favorite anime girls so I was biased but I didn't feel repulsed by the grammar like many fanfics on this site. It's just something about Chinese writers and some stories with a lack of writing experience that irks me be it the descriptions or just the dialogue. Overall this story is worth a read and this is saying something due to the fact of the matter is I've only ever given put 3 reviews. But keep in mind if you do not like your favorite characters dying do not read. That's really it he does the whole villain thing well and if he gets the romance written properly I'd say it is perfection. And to everyone who says villains can't fall in love with someone or be emotionally attached that's quite false the only way for that to be true would be a mental illness known as I believe sociopathy or psychopathy. I get the two mixed up one of them your born with the other can be gained. I do believe it is sociopathy that is the correct terminology. Anyways wonderful job I gotta go before my readers yell at me I truly look forward to what you do with the story seeya later.

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ILoveChaos
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Hmm, That's really a perfect short summary for my fic. I appreciate the time you took out to write this. Since it's kinda nicely described Ima pin this. (PS- I know the grammar between ch-3 and ch11 is but rough but I didn't have Grammarly at that time so it was a little inevitable for me to make mistakes since it isn't my first language xD. I didn't edit those chapters because all the paragraph comments and some very good suggestions would get deleted like ch 1, 2, and 3. I'm glad that there weren't too many of them so I won't have to re-edit xD)

deadly_orange
deadly_orangeLv13

Its no problem at all it's what I am here for you did a really good job honestly it's just the first three that were particularly noticable other than that like I said great job and even then you can understand what you were trying to say so it's not even unreadable. But I am truly happy to help out.

ILoveChaos:Hmm, That's really a perfect short summary for my fic. I appreciate the time you took out to write this. Since it's kinda nicely described Ima pin this. (PS- I know the grammar between ch-3 and ch11 is but rough but I didn't have Grammarly at that time so it was a little inevitable for me to make mistakes since it isn't my first language xD. I didn't edit those chapters because all the paragraph comments and some very good suggestions would get deleted like ch 1, 2, and 3. I'm glad that there weren't too many of them so I won't have to re-edit xD)
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ILoveChaos
ILoveChaosAuthor

Hmm, I've heard a lot about how toxic webnovel was but I've mostly had a very supportive community. Thanks. I see you write too. I'll check the Meliodas one tomorrow. Seven deadly sins fics are quite rare. Sadly, I don't really know the plot or story about Omniman and Gravity falls xD.

deadly_orange:Its no problem at all it's what I am here for you did a really good job honestly it's just the first three that were particularly noticable other than that like I said great job and even then you can understand what you were trying to say so it's not even unreadable. But I am truly happy to help out.
deadly_orange
deadly_orangeLv13

Yeah it's all good plus your in luck on that one since that's a story I guaranteed won't be dropped or paused unlike one or two other stories. Since I realized I will need to sort out my money situation in a year or so. But actually the community kind of is I've met them before it actually usually happens later on I have whole message histories in my evidence section of the toxic side though they are rare. Anywho sorry for the rant I think I do a decent job in writing my Vessalius story and Hazbin one are by far my best stories and my omniman one you don't need to know the story to get into it. Basically omniman is a more gruesome superhero story to put it as simple as possible

ILoveChaos:Hmm, I've heard a lot about how toxic webnovel was but I've mostly had a very supportive community. Thanks. I see you write too. I'll check the Meliodas one tomorrow. Seven deadly sins fics are quite rare. Sadly, I don't really know the plot or story about Omniman and Gravity falls xD.
deadly_orange
deadly_orangeLv13

Oh and my gravity falls one I want to do a rewrite and my plans for it make it so you don't need to know gravity falls to like it.

ILoveChaos:Hmm, I've heard a lot about how toxic webnovel was but I've mostly had a very supportive community. Thanks. I see you write too. I'll check the Meliodas one tomorrow. Seven deadly sins fics are quite rare. Sadly, I don't really know the plot or story about Omniman and Gravity falls xD.
ILoveChaos
ILoveChaosAuthor

Ah I just checked and the Vassilus (Don't know if I wrote that right...) one is an SDS fic too. About the Hazbin one... Do I need to know about the original plot or something? Don't worry about the rant tho, I don't see a problem in any discussion or conversation xD. Got a Discord Server? I'm curious about the "Toxicity" you mentioned. xD

deadly_orange:Yeah it's all good plus your in luck on that one since that's a story I guaranteed won't be dropped or paused unlike one or two other stories. Since I realized I will need to sort out my money situation in a year or so. But actually the community kind of is I've met them before it actually usually happens later on I have whole message histories in my evidence section of the toxic side though they are rare. Anywho sorry for the rant I think I do a decent job in writing my Vessalius story and Hazbin one are by far my best stories and my omniman one you don't need to know the story to get into it. Basically omniman is a more gruesome superhero story to put it as simple as possible
ILoveChaos
ILoveChaosAuthor

Cool, I'll check it out when I'm free since that has a lot of chapters and my schedule is a little tight with my exams coming soon. Just wrote half a draft for the new chapter so I had a little free time xD.

deadly_orange:Oh and my gravity falls one I want to do a rewrite and my plans for it make it so you don't need to know gravity falls to like it.
deadly_orange
deadly_orangeLv13

Sounds good the gravity falls one might go through a full blown rewrite soon lol though some things will stay the same quite a few things will infact. Honestly like I recommended hazbin or Vessalius are your best bets if you like quality stories since gravity falls is from a time I wasn't as good as I am now still is not the best after some editing

ILoveChaos:Cool, I'll check it out when I'm free since that has a lot of chapters and my schedule is a little tight with my exams coming soon. Just wrote half a draft for the new chapter so I had a little free time xD.
deadly_orange
deadly_orangeLv13

And thanks I tend to rant alot lol

ILoveChaos:Ah I just checked and the Vassilus (Don't know if I wrote that right...) one is an SDS fic too. About the Hazbin one... Do I need to know about the original plot or something? Don't worry about the rant tho, I don't see a problem in any discussion or conversation xD. Got a Discord Server? I'm curious about the "Toxicity" you mentioned. xD
ILoveChaos
ILoveChaosAuthor

Hmm, I'll read it after the re-write then :)

deadly_orange:Sounds good the gravity falls one might go through a full blown rewrite soon lol though some things will stay the same quite a few things will infact. Honestly like I recommended hazbin or Vessalius are your best bets if you like quality stories since gravity falls is from a time I wasn't as good as I am now still is not the best after some editing
ILoveChaos
ILoveChaosAuthor

You think you can rant more than some girls I know? No way. XD

deadly_orange:And thanks I tend to rant alot lol
deadly_orange
deadly_orangeLv13

Bold of you to assume that lol XD

ILoveChaos:You think you can rant more than some girls I know? No way. XD
AshuraMikoto
AshuraMikotoLv14

hello there im a good friend of deadly orange and i would like to reccomend his new story Beelzebub The Red King its a really good story would love to know what your opinion on it is im actually the one who gave the idea of the story to deadlyorange so yeah im curious what other authors think about it[img=recommend]

ILoveChaos:Hmm, I've heard a lot about how toxic webnovel was but I've mostly had a very supportive community. Thanks. I see you write too. I'll check the Meliodas one tomorrow. Seven deadly sins fics are quite rare. Sadly, I don't really know the plot or story about Omniman and Gravity falls xD.
ILoveChaos
ILoveChaosAuthor

Hmm? I did see it on discord but I was waiting for more chapters but I don't mind giving my opinion on chapter 1.

AshuraMikoto:hello there im a good friend of deadly orange and i would like to reccomend his new story Beelzebub The Red King its a really good story would love to know what your opinion on it is im actually the one who gave the idea of the story to deadlyorange so yeah im curious what other authors think about it[img=recommend]
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AshuraMikoto
AshuraMikotoLv14

theres gonna be some more chapters coming soon maybe wait a few days then give opinion? btw what is ur user on discord

ILoveChaos:Hmm? I did see it on discord but I was waiting for more chapters but I don't mind giving my opinion on chapter 1.
ILoveChaos
ILoveChaosAuthor

I've already given my opinion on Discord in the [#Story Section]. It's Yuma

AshuraMikoto:theres gonna be some more chapters coming soon maybe wait a few days then give opinion? btw what is ur user on discord
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