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2021-06-09 07:17

I am not sure about the updates. Its a new novel and those get dropped really early. But if the chapters are good and the novel is continued, then this is a steal

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This review is as of Chapter 65 - I won't spend my limited free passes on this novel nor do I wish to waste anymore time or spend money on this novel. Short summary: The novel has your classic fantasy setting with a bit of isekai/reincarnation. The MC is NOT OP, though he does have an apparently perfect memory as well as abilities and knowledge well outside anything he should have from his previous occupation that he suddenly has in this new world. He has the standard MC luck of most things working out in his favor with little to no downside. Arrogant young masters abound - they do not get face slapped, they usually just fizzle out. The chapters are written in a very rushed and disorganized manner with topics and characters being thrown around progression of the chapter. One positive thing I'll say, the world background has potential - but the earlier chapters (the author claims the later chapters are better) at least need to be rewritten or at the very least edited and then re-uploaded. Longer explanation: Writing Quality: Frequent errors abound the early chapters, its that simple. Its clear to tell the author isn't well versed in writing in English though the writing can generally be followed but you will likely scratch your head while reading more often than not. Some of the later free reading chapters (58-65) have a sudden downturn in quality that really sealed my judgement for the writing quality. Furthermore, scenes are often jumped between and time skips kind of come out of left field with no lead in like "and so (MC) settled into his new routine as time passed, with two months going by in the blink of an eye", instead events are happening when suddenly, time skip. In chapter 63 or there about, some lines are very much out of place as a scene at the beginning of the chapter suddenly has a line towards the end that clearly was meant to go with that but its not present with that scene. tl;dr: Very "buggy" (disjointed, for non-gamers) feeling and could really use an edit/re-write of the earlier chapters especially if you want to convince users to invest free passes or coins into the novel. Stability of Updates: Seems decent? all the free chapters were already released as of when I started but the table of contents shows a bit of a off-beat release schedule with some of the higher chapters so I'm only giving it a 3-star. Check other reviews of those who have read longer for more info on this. Story Developement: The novel's story feels rushed. Its that simple. There is no exposition between characters and no real world building that doesn't directly advance the plot. This might not be bad in a novel with great writing quality, but the novel's writing quality is as stated above - bad. As such I can't say the story is good at all, its honestly just hard to follow and the interactions between characters will have you thinking two characters are going to possibly be friends until the very next chapter when it looks like they might become sworn enemies - with little to no reason given for the change. tl;dr: its not great, and the writing quality only makes it worse. Character Design: Again, writing quality hinders here. The MC is reincarnated (this happens in the first chapter so its not a spoiler) and has the "I am omnicient about all things modern despite having a job that should have had no exposure to these things" - this is a pet peeve of mine so I am a tad bias. However, its got some of the cliches I tend to like. Old grandpa figure who teaches MC? check. Elves that are a touch haughty but not insane? ... kind of check (can't explain since trying to stay spoiler free - it has to do with the writing quality/story developement though). One issue I find is that the author will build up a character and then within a few chapters completely change them without any rhyme or reason. tl;dr: characters are rather typical of a fantasy/reincarnation story, but the writing and story REALLY take a hit out of them. World Background: As I mentioned in the short version, THIS HAS POTENTIAL!!! I like a fantasy world with an established magic system (definitely like the angle the author took with his in the novel, but again, spoilers so read about 20-25 chapters to find out what I'm talking about), a clear cut enemy, various kingdoms (single empire controlling everything can get boring if parts of it aren't regionalized enough), and a decent history for the world as hinted at in some of the exchanges and exposition from characters. However, this world is honestly chained by the writing quality and story development - maybe in the future it gets better, but I cannot justify nor recommend using fast passes or coins to find out. tl;dr: good potential, sadly that potential is not realized

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