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OrdinaryRandomLv12yrOrdinaryRandom

Hey, i've been looking at your novel for quite a bit now and thought i should write a review to help you get 10 reviews. Your story and setting is nice but the dialogue and the characters actions seem a tad bit rushed. Try slowing things down a notch :D

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Mister_ImaginativeLv13Mister_Imaginative

okay thanks for the advice I'll keep it in mind.I basically used to write short stories so writing a novel is my first with this one

2yr

OrdinaryRandomLv1OrdinaryRandom

Ah, no wonder everything was so fast paced. But still its a nice orginal concept. (as far as orginality in system based novels goes) Keep up the good work.

Mister_Imaginative:okay thanks for the advice I'll keep it in mind.I basically used to write short stories so writing a novel is my first with this one

2yr