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ForgottenHope
ForgottenHopeLv43yr
2021-06-26 13:52

I really like what you got going on here, but the grammar is pretty bad. Regardless am enjoying this a lot, but please re-read your chapters at least 3 times before updating the story. Also, you might wanna correct some/alot of grammatical mistakes on the last chapters, because for a lot of people the first chapters are always their first impressions of the book.

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SHIVAM_Chouksey
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thank you for letting me know.[img=recommend]

TheQuickReader
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i think that too , the story is interesting and fun but the grammar is killing me , i read to chapter 30 and i kind of wanna take a break from this , this is the sole reason .

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