Review Detail of Aaron_McLeod_1690 in Is this really a Game?!
Review detail
writing quality takes a very steep, very hard dive about 60 chapters in. english writing is in past tense, not present. the story is a bit pedantic, and lacks any sort of development. the characters are stock tropes and stereotypes, and fifty chapters in they have yet to develop in any way, minor or major (no, levelling up and gaining skills do not count as character development). the world has little to no background information given. you know almost nothing about it. the characters magically know about monsters, attributes, skills and abilities, but nothing is ever explained to the reader.
Is this really a Game?!
TheReign
Liked by 11 people
LIKEReplies3
Alright, so about character development, yeah, that comes after like 80+ chapters. The characters knowing the monsters, well man I don't know what to tell you, everybody knows freaking goblins, hobgoblins, kobolds... Not to mention that Reign later gets the Inspection ability which lets him know more about the monster that he inspects As for the writing, I will agree that I have mixed past and present tense here and there which will be weird for some people, but the quality takes a steep dive after chapter 60? You're the first one to say that, and saying that english writing is in the past tense is just incorrect man, past is used because it allows for a lot of things, but you can write in the present tense as well
TheReign:Alright, so about character development, yeah, that comes after like 80+ chapters. The characters knowing the monsters, well man I don't know what to tell you, everybody knows freaking goblins, hobgoblins, kobolds... Not to mention that Reign later gets the Inspection ability which lets him know more about the monster that he inspects As for the writing, I will agree that I have mixed past and present tense here and there which will be weird for some people, but the quality takes a steep dive after chapter 60? You're the first one to say that, and saying that english writing is in the past tense is just incorrect man, past is used because it allows for a lot of things, but you can write in the present tense as well
Yup, and I have edited a couple of the earlier chaps, and all of those after pike chap 200 are past, as is my second novel, don't really remember why I was writing in the present tense so much before tbh
The_Fool12:Past tense is the more common than present tense, and it's my favorite compared to presentimage