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it's called a parkade.
Instead of an empty parking lot, a new building appeared on top of the flatland. It was a parking lot building. - Aaron_McLeod_16907mthCommented
oh sweet merciful lords, Anthony... take pictures when they wake up
[Well, the fighting is going okay without me, Solant is doing well with her training and you three are doing great getting levels… so I'm getting a bit bored. And I have to say,] he chuckled, [that this, is going to be HILARIOUS.] - Aaron_McLeod_16907mthPosted
starting from the bottom, the world is a stock idea, with a variant take on it. updates come out regularly sure. the characters. this author has 0 idea about how to write a realistic female character. in the first 20 chapters he writes a coercive sexual assault style interaction between the "lovable MC" and a female. the MC has no unique qualities, immediately becomes overpowered without any sort of effort or struggle, and is overall an ugly character. the writing shows no growth or development, and reads like it was written by someone who thinks of women as nothing more than objects who owe men everything simply because men exist.
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true, but block a strike with a staff or spear versus blocking with a dagger or shortsword. different weapons have different difficulties in using. and a short blade requires significantly more skill to utilize correctly
Daggers, daggers are good, because they can be dipped in poison and can deal fatal blows from cover, but let's be realistic, I'm no assassin, and a dagger needs a lot of experience, like a lot, and it's one of the most difficult weapons to master. Simply put, because it has so many disadvantages in a fight to properly use one effectively one must be god tier in dagger mastery. - Aaron_McLeod_16901yrReplied to JesusXChrist
Monty Python and the holy grail's priest says this. it's blatant plagiarism/a call out to the work. and knowing those writers, they appreciate pretty much every shout out to their work, especially the holy hand grenade
"O Lord, bless this thy hand grenade, that with it thou mayst blow thine enemies to tiny bits, in thy mercy." Chants Jenny as the orb glows brighter in between her hands as she brings them to her face to pray. Mumbling under her breath the pulling of a pin is heard before the small girl counts to three, not two nor one and most definitely not four. Upon hitting the number three Jenny lobs the orb above her head towards the approaching form of Spooky and dives towards the boss, barely going under its jaws but receiving several spikes in her back from the elongated spikes on his tail. - Aaron_McLeod_16901yrCommented
you're* the support. your - possessive, as in ownership. you're - contraction of you are
'Your job isn't done yet Slax! The only way you'll get stronger is to fight and win so in this case your the support! You got this man!' I shout at him as he nods and wipes the sweat of his brow while making his way behind the pack and facing the entrance as the first creature pokes it's head into the room. - Aaron_McLeod_16901yrCommented
so smart, and yet so dumb. the sweet smell of betrayal
"Wha - " Tungstant began to say. - Aaron_McLeod_16901yrCommented
kept tabs* on them. taps - an opening from which a liquid pours tabs - a form of marking, usually sticky notes, used to keep track of information. in this slang, keeping tabs on a person means keeping attention on them.
One thing seemed clear, the orc kingdom knew about them and even kept taps on them. It seemed like it was time for Minas Mar to make a final move. After all, they wouldn't want to be stuck between both forces. - Aaron_McLeod_16901yrCommented
hodge-podge, not hotpotch.
Most of them had a military background and a tragic past, but what else they managed to remember of their lives seemed like normal relatable experiences. Although there was a setting-in period, with Minas Mar already being a hotpotch of people, it didn't take long for them to find their place. - Aaron_McLeod_16901yrCommented
it is physically impossible to have blonde hair with this genealogy. the dominant strain from either the black or Asian heritage (brown/black) would be prevalent, not blonde. nice try though, author.
Due to this, Randy was quarter Asian, quarter Black, and half White. As a result of that, Randy had a light skin complexion with his blonde hair in a curly form. His eyes were grey in color, unlike his sister who had blue eyes from his mother. Randy seemed like the only one with grey eye color in their family. - Aaron_McLeod_16901yrPosted
stereotypical sociopathic overpowered MC. the plot has holes the size of Nevada, the story has no development or drive in the first fifty chapters other than the MC patting himself on the back. the MC is literally just someone with no conscience or relatability killing things and becoming "allpowerful", and there is no world background to speak of. basically, a poor attempt at a novel.
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🤣 that was an amazing simile
Once Lex returned to his apartment, he investigated the ring given to him by John, but when he saw the size of the massive book that appeared in his mind, he quietly and respectfully put it away. That was not to say that he had given up on the book, but that currently he had his hands full with learning his techniques and didn't have the mental energy to read what looked like a physical representation of Wikipedia. - Aaron_McLeod_16901yrCommented
to get groceries. doing groceries would be an extremely inappropriate sexual action that would get you in trouble at the supermarket
"Belle went out to work, Liz went out to do groceries. Speaking of which, follow me." - Aaron_McLeod_16901yrCommented
...didn't sell* an herb...
"No they didn't sold a herbs but a weapon which broke while fighting." - Aaron_McLeod_16901yrCommented
errand to run. making errands would mean creating an errand for someone. running them means to complete them.
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moping not mopping. mope (ending with a single consonent and and e as the suffix) means the active tense only receives one consonant (moping). mop, no e suffix, gets the double consonant for the active tense (mopping). she is mopping the floor.
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warriors have* come. plural conjugation
"Ohohoho, I see a bunch of strong and brave warriors has come to offer themselves as a blood sacrifice!" they heard a cackling voice. - Aaron_McLeod_16901yrCommented
hunters (in the dark) who, for clarification
They could see the aura of vitality any living thing gave off. The darkness could do nothing to blind the golems. Like most hunters in the dark used ambushes, they had become easy prey after they were unable to hide. - Aaron_McLeod_16901yrCommented
like most hunters who*
They could see the aura of vitality any living thing gave off. The darkness could do nothing to blind the golems. Like most hunters in the dark used ambushes, they had become easy prey after they were unable to hide.