Item: Break the Void
Rating: 4
Author: Mister_Writer

Mister_WriterLv113yr

2021-05-30 21:33

The story is good for now. I hope the author would continue, and improve his story in future chapters. Will give a full review when there are enough chapters for me to look upon. Kudos

Break the Void

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EIIipseAuthor

Thank you for the review and constructive criticism in chapters <3

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