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2021-06-26 12:40

so far so good. '

Break the Void

EIIipse
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Thank you for the continued support! As a new author I really appreciate it <3 I hope you're enjoying where the story goes, and if you have any constructive criticism, let me know. PS: I usually edit chapters one day after writing them, so if you see a chapter posted right away, and the quality is sub-par, please check back for the re-release. The only reason I post unedited chapters is to make sure my novel can utilize WN algorithm.

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uncledavie
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I really am enjoying your story so far, it makes good use of classic tropes (isekai, video game, system) while still having some really good original concepts like the grand void. As far as advice goes the only thing I'd recommend you to do is storyboard (if you havent already). Lots of times I read stories with great original concepts, but because the author didnt do a great job of storyboarding the novel started to seem directionless, and stagnant (atleast to the readers). I'd hate to see that happen here, so I'd just recommend not to underestimate the importance of plot, and how it can make or break a story.

EIIipse:Thank you for the continued support! As a new author I really appreciate it <3 I hope you're enjoying where the story goes, and if you have any constructive criticism, let me know. PS: I usually edit chapters one day after writing them, so if you see a chapter posted right away, and the quality is sub-par, please check back for the re-release. The only reason I post unedited chapters is to make sure my novel can utilize WN algorithm.
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uncledavie
uncledavieLv13

Ah as a side note, so far your story doesnt have a lot of world development, it's still early but it would be good to learn about other kingdoms/cities and races (so far we only know about nordenheim and the silver empire). Also how is society In this new world, is it feudal? What's the geography like? These are all things you might want to expand on in the next arc when Mc comes back from the grand void. Sorry for being nosy, it's your story, I'm just excited to what happens next. Happy writing :)

EIIipse:Thank you for the continued support! As a new author I really appreciate it <3 I hope you're enjoying where the story goes, and if you have any constructive criticism, let me know. PS: I usually edit chapters one day after writing them, so if you see a chapter posted right away, and the quality is sub-par, please check back for the re-release. The only reason I post unedited chapters is to make sure my novel can utilize WN algorithm.
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