Review Detail of Tiphereth in The BloodHound: Von's Shades

Overall review, 4.6 out of 5 I have no complaints with anything other than the writing quality, which I gave a 3/5 (explanation below) Reading this novel was a bit hard, due to the overexcessive use of commas, which plagued my reading experience, until it kinda felt like this sentence right here, long and dragging, with multiple commas placed in a far too long sentence, except that this style of writing was used all across your paragraphs. That was pretty hard to read, right? Sentence variation is key, and can make your story more enjoyable to read. For example, you don't want to overuse super long sentences that can tire your reader out, but you also can't keep using choppy sentences either. Periods, semicolons, commas, hyphens, and all sorts of things can increase sentence variation. But the story is great overall. 4.6/5, neat ideas. Good luck on writing!