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2021-08-30 00:30

Story not so intriguing. Character development needs more focus. There seems to may gaps to be filled. A sense on incomplete ness. A more comprehensive approach required.

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When I first swa the description I was so excited that I couldnt help but mtl it but after reading it Im not quite sure how to feel about it Spoiler Alert!!! . . . . . . . . . . . . . . The mistunderstandigs of her 5 blood related brothers get resolved by the mc lne by one. With whom she ends up is already obvious in the first chapters: her childhood friend. The story was alright but was kinda disappointing is that the author made the ml lose his memories of the mc (amnesia 🙄😑). The are separated for a long time before they get back together. Before the amnesia plot happened mc‘s system gets captured by the fake sister (the one who lived a great life in mc‘s place whereas the mc was kinda "mistrested" by fake sister's parents. Only her grandfather was good to her. Later on it gets found out that mc‘s biological morher is the missing daughter of her grandfather. Wonder why they havent thought of it when mc resembles her mother so much 😑... this makes mc and fake sister cousins. Btw the fake sister was responsible for the five brothers scandalds 🙄. furthermore she takes mc‘s moms song and takes it as her own, no credits at all. she was not willing to admit it until mc proved it.) Fake sister got the help of someone (not sure who he was but he seemed to be angry or envious of mcs life with her system (not sure if I remember it correctly, if someone knows it, feel free to correct it) Anyways after the systems gets captured, the "mighty sus beeing" helps fake sister‘s soul go into the body of mc while mc‘s soul goes into a snake her 3rd brother (doc) kept. The ml and mc‘s brothers find out about the soul exchange and try to resolve it. It gets resolved in the end... The ending was kinda disappointing (you will know what I mean after reading it 🤦‍♀️) No side stories about the mc&ml, nor her brothers, fathers There is no ch where mc‘s father and her grandfather who raised her talk about mc‘s mother etc There is one side story where the fake sister wakes up in a world where mc already died as a 14 y old girl, the ml followed her. She "regrets" treating mc‘s brothers and father wrongly (Hahaha after knowing that they are more successfull than the family you always wanted (biological family) and that you know what you could have had if you didnt act the way you did 🙄😑) She visits her grandfathers house, where mc lived before she died in this world (she didnt meet the system here) and has a convo with him about mc like they were "good friends" 🙄 Note: in her past life she plotted to expose that shes not the daughter of mc‘s father. in this life its not exposed

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